Forever Isn't Always Pretty

[rawrtothefifth]

Yeah I can't think of a title real good or whatever.  And I read it a bajillion times to check grammar and spelling but still, if there are any mistakes please forgive them.

Pairings: Jacob/Nessie Jacob/Bella
rating: Teen
Warnings: Character death(s) and slightly... creepy(?) plot device.
Summary: Renesmee was supposed to live forever and ever with

Comments

[surruhsometimes]

How depressing.
:0!
I really like it. Great writing!

[rawrtothefifth]

Thank you! I don't normally like writing depressing things because then I get depressed but I felt liek this had tobe done.

[saramiskismet]

You don't know how difficult it was for me to click on a link knowing the story would involve Renesmee, but ilu and it's your first fic and I wanted to see :3

*reviewing as I read*

Aah, you kept me so curious for so long about the letter!

Jacob would visit when he wasn’t with Nessie; he had long lost his pack when he gave his only Alpha orders for them to go to La Push and live out their lives, so he was eager to speak to anyone new.
Ugghh, that's what burns me so much. Jacob trapped in eternity. *pulls up shirt and cries into it*

Nahuel's death is stunningly tragic in its own right, in addition to being surrounded by the foreshadowing of Renesmee's. The poor bb~ D: Bella's reaction to it is great, very in-character for her.

Jacob was against his imprintee becoming like the woman he used to love.
Ooooh, heavy.

This is the first time I've seen this idea ever even ~mentioned~ and it was executed beautifully. I am so impressed by this. It's going in my memories. Oh my gosh.

[saramiskismet]

Excuse me. First Twilight fic. :D

[rawrtothefifth]

lol yeah I figured it'd be hard for a lot of people seeing Nessie's name in it. But yeah actually Nahuel's death was my favorite part to write. It was so dramatic for me and he was really a shining light for me in the book even though he was there for like, ten pages D:

Oh my, I am so honored that you'd put this in your memories! Thank you so much!

[rawrtothefifth]

argh I wish I could edit replies! Anyway yeah I never saw anyone else mention this idea, I was thinking about asking the community if anyone would like to take it up because I didn't feel confident enough but then I felt like it'd be bothersome to them lol xD

[modestgoddess79]

very original and well executed idea

[wewerentcrazy08]

i like the idea, i've never seen it before. && i almost wanted to cry when bella wouldnt go see nauhl and then rosalie and everyone wouldnt be around nessie, its so sad : (

[puffles_puff]

Hey, it's me, Tihmm/Alice now. You haven't been on in a long time and I'm really worried about you..

I leave for Boot Camp in 3 days, so please contact me if you ever get on. Or better yet, I'm always on AIM. PLEASE message me!

DON'T BE DEAD!

[rawrtothefifth]

good luck in boot camp though! I'm rooting for you :]

[puffles_puff]

I lave for Boot Camp tomorrow! DAMN YOU AND YOUR NEW BOYFRIEND! -sobs-

Though, congrats. And he sounds half way responsible. Whee