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rattyjol

If They Never Came

Feb 14, 2011 22:23

Title: If They Never Came
Fandom: Animorphs
Characters/Pairings: All mains and a few minors; brief Jake/Cassie
Notes/Spoilers: No spoilers except one family's name. AU.
Rating: PG
Summary: This is how their lives were meant to go. It was the Yeerks that destroyed them.
I feel like I gave too many of them tragic deaths . . . ah, screw it. Nothing wrong ( Read more... )

jake berenson, aximili, jordan b, sara b, rachel b, marco, cassie, tom b, tobias, animorphs, elfangor, eva

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rattyjol February 16 2011, 02:04:25 UTC

Um. -flails- I knew I killed most of them off pretty early but I didn't realize I was that bad. xD Well Elfangor and Tom don't have specific ages when they die so thereIfixedit. ^_^

Not a problem, I'm glad you enjoyed it! ^_^ Thanks for reading.

totallystellar February 20 2011, 16:50:29 UTC

Oh wow. This is so good - it's so succinct and the way it's delivered is a little severe in the best way, like how the tragic deaths are laid out so plainly. Each life summary fits the character so well! :) And I love that you included not just the Animorphs but their family members as well.

The only problem I had with it is their last names. For me they don't fit, but that's probably because I'm just prejudiced to my own made up ones, and has nothing to do with your actual writing. :P

rattyjol February 20 2011, 23:40:00 UTC

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. ^_^ That's one of the reasons I chose third person, so I could portray what happened without any one character's emotions getting in the way. I realized after the fact that I probably should have included James and Loren as well, but I think it was Collette that said James didn't have anything but a nursing home to look forward to when he left the rehab center, and Loren would have just kept living like she was when Tobias found her, soo.

Ooh, what names did you pick?