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Map of Stars - Part Four

Sep 28, 2007 17:49

The Elrics were pensive, quiet drunks. More likely to write or read or go to sleep than laugh uproariously or enter a fistfight, although the later wasn’t entirely impossible.

They joined the old and stooped and bone-weary at the bar. Al vaguely remembered expecting some dizzying euphoria. Al vaguely remembered expecting something, and waiting for ( Read more... )

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laissesfaire November 7 2007, 09:06:08 UTC

Leaving this comment...I'm not sure if it will bother you or not, because I tend to stay as far away as possible from commenting at random like this, but I just had to this time. <3 ( ... )

brainrat November 12 2007, 04:53:35 UTC

Thank you so very much for your kind words. I've been seriously out of it for the past few days, so it took a while for me to reply and I'm really sorry for that. I really don't know how else I can adequately say thanks. :) People like you are a blessing. Really. And I'll friend you back right after this. :) Thanks.

azure15 April 21 2008, 18:57:28 UTC

This has left me at a loss for words. Which is so frustrating, because I really want to get across just how amazing this is. You have Al spot on, and I love how you've given him that darker side to his personality, the insight to his thoughts and feelings. You have a talent with words, and the story flowed beautifully because of that. You added in enough to keep things interesting, but you also spaced out the 'ship' side of the story, which worked out amazingly.

I... just love this fic so much. I've gotten inspiration JUST from reading it, the heapings of detail that you've put into this. The sheer EMOTION in the written word.. .gah. This is failing... I just can't express how much I love this work.

You're an amazing writer, and very talented. This work is.. hell, it's gorgeous.

brainrat April 21 2008, 21:48:13 UTC

Wow, thanks for such a lovely, thoughtful comment. :) I sincerely appreciate it and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this fic! :)

neverr_mind April 25 2008, 10:33:58 UTC

Best elricest angst I've ever read.
Thank you so for it

I just can't.... pbocookiegirl June 8 2012, 02:21:56 UTC

Words are kinda what I'm good at....but this time I'm left speechless. You have such a beautiful, distracted lilt to your writing.... Feels very true to Al especially...and Ed just makes me wanna grab him and squeeze him until he gets it.
I LOVE LOVE LOVE that you addressed Noah's complete lack of anything resembling a backbone. Its something I love and hate about her.
The WAY you describe places...and how they match up.... and when you described the times they had at Risenbull... and the Roma/Ishbalans comparison.
You are an artist, and even while you've written this years ago... Its new for me :3. Love this story and love your prose.

michechu January 22 2013, 11:59:57 UTC

I'm several years late on leaving a comment for this, but I had to tell you how much I adore this fic. It's so beautifully written, and I love your interpretations of Ed and Al's personalities-- Ed in particular because you captured his angst and his devotion to his little brother so wonderfully. There's tons of Elricest fanfics out there, but this one is by far my favorite and the only thing I don't like about it is that it ended. =( The open ending is nice, though, and I love imagining where their relationship went afterwards...

Al's so delightfully frank in this fanfic that I imagine his little admissions of desire would eventually break Ed and cause him to snap. I assume it would be pretty difficult to keep that lust in check when Al's goading him with little comments about how Ed tastes and pilfering his cigarettes to quell his own addiction.

Ed's doomed.