The Telling of One Billion Ghost Stories (draft) - Part 31

[rallamajoop]

Ye gods, I was not counting on this chapter taking this long to finish. >_< Wasn't counting on it turning into a single scene that went on for very nearly six thousand words either. It's been a real chapter for underestimation. I'm so very sorry.Just a quick side note to since there've been quite a lot of people pointing out typos in the last

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[cat_i_th_adage]

Wah! Dark Tomoyo is scary!

Thank you very much for the update. :-)

[rallamajoop]

Oh, very. I'm writing for her and even I find some of the stuff she comes out with pretty terrifying.

Glad you thought it was worth the wait. ^_^

[cat_i_th_adage]

It was, definitely.

Still hard to call Tomoyo wrong, though, not if you're playing the numbers. And she is staying up where the consequences of failure would hit her first... a scary, scary lady.

I feel intensely sorry for the seers right now. I can kinda see 'em, all huddled together under the storm... *wince*

[perseid]

YES! ♥ ♥ ♥ TBH, this is exactly the Tomoyo I actually envisioned in the original CCS series. I love how you've fleshed her out. Looking forward to more. =)

[rallamajoop]

You envisioned the original cute little CCS Tomoyo growing up into evil!Tomoyo? (Or severely morally questionable Tomoyo, to be more exact.) That is a bit of a leap. XD; She really did slip into this persona frighteningly easily once I'd been given the idea for it though - we may just be lucky that in the regular series she's always used her powers for good.

Good to hear you're enjoying, I'll try not to keep everyone waiting too long this time.

[perseid]

hahah would you believe she always struck me as devilish or creepy more than cute in the actual series? ^^;; yes, it is a very good thing she used her powers for good

again, looking fwd to more! =)

[wicked_liz]

GOOD LORD O_O

Your Tomoyo is brilliantly Terrifying! She's just like some insane politician. All serene justifications that trample over everything.

She's probably my favourite character now.

The age thing is just an additional creepy factor. @_@

I can't believe she offered them a place, wow - she must really want Watanuki. I guess it's also because unlike the girls, Watanuki can actually communicate with the ghosts.

O_O *waits for update*

[rallamajoop]

Your Tomoyo is brilliantly Terrifying! She's just like some insane politician. All serene justifications that trample over everything.

She is, isn't she? She's like the ultimate politician who's actually mastered the art of fooling everyone, or who's just close enough to right that she doesn't need to fool people most of the time.

The age thing is just an additional creepy factor. @_@

You have to wonder what the regular Complex residents make about that - it can't be common knowledge. But I just can't picture her being older than how we've seen her in Tsubasa, so there needed to be some kind of explanation.

I can't believe she offered them a place, wow - she must really want Watanuki. I guess it's also because unlike the girls, Watanuki can actually communicate with the ghosts.She has plenty of reasons for it (which she certainly went on about at sufficient length), and she does want the girls too - Watanuki mostly stands out because he's had the most success getting practical results out of talking to the dead. But with someone

[duchessa]

Now I want a Tomoyo background story. There must be a reason why she chose to clone Syaoran and Sakura. Creepy.

[rallamajoop]

The thing about characters like this Tomoyo is that she's so mysterious and has so many ulterior motives below ulterior motives for everything she does is that you really can't give definite answers without spoiling the whole mystery. That goes right up to authorial level, in fact - even I only get to know as many background details as I really need to know to write her. But on that particular subject, regardless of what she may have told Kurogane, it's not too hard to imagine that a whole room full of Sakuras is a reward in itself to any Tomoyo, hm?

[oozaru_angel]

Tomoyo is horrifying and I love her so much. “All?” said Fye, haughtily, snapping his attention back to her. “You think I’m going to abandon Kurogane here alone with you and your mind games, do you? That line is possibly one of my fave Fye lines so far in this fic. XD

[rallamajoop]

Mm, Fye gets to have his little protective moment there. It's practically the reversal of who gets to take care of who and such in the real series, but I'm glad you thought it worked. ^_^

[oozaru_angel]

And it just occured to me that you had Fai calling Kuro-sama by his full name. It could be that he's trying to be formal in front of Tomoyo but I rather like the line "“You think I’m going to abandon my Kurotan here alone with you and your mind games, do you?" Just a thought. Makes it sound even more protective and possesive.