Breaking Points - Chapter Three

[ragdoll987]

Title: Breaking Points
Author: Ragdoll
Pairing: Kirk/Spock
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Not mine, more's the pity.

Summary: When the Enterprise is asked to transport Vulcan colonists to their new home, Spock Prime comes with them. His presence changes everything - even the things Jim isn’t sure he wants to change.

Comments

[coin]

That was so cute. You are fantastic with dialog. Especially the entire last scene.

[novembersmith]

YOUR ICON OMG. <3

[coin]

I AM GLAD YOU LIKE. <3 I have only uploaded about a million animated Pinto icons, even if some have the same clips >.>

[ragdoll987]

I agree that your icon rocks!!

And thank you! The dialogue is actually what comes to me first, a lot of the rest of it I have to write later, otherwise I lose track of story presence lol.

[dancinguniverse]

I don't usually comment on stories in progress, but I just wanted to drop a note to say that I am really enjoying this, and looking forward to more.

[candesgirl]

Right there with you. I typically don't even read WIPs but this is too good to pass up. Can't wait to see more.

[ragdoll987]

More will be soon! =D Every 2-3 days like clockwork, I promise!

[ragdoll987]

Well thank you! I'm glad I could pull a comment out of you! Hopefully some of the other chapters are appealing enough to warrant another one! =D

[_sin_attract]

I absolutely love this fic so far. It's written so well, you write both Spock characters incredibly well and the dialogue between them all is just fantastic. I can't wait for more, I'm really enjoying this fic!

[ragdoll987]

I've become very proud of my characterizations lately with everyone complimenting me, soon I'll get a swelled head! I shall become the new Jim Kirk incarnate! (It will help me to write his character, of course!)

[moon_watcher99]

Oh my God! I cannot wait to see where you will be taking this! Seriously, the characterizations are just...perfect. I have no words for how awesome this is.

“What?” Both Spock’s spoke loudly, identical expressions of alarm on their faces. Jim fought down the insane desire to laugh.

“Captain? Captain, are you all right?”

He turned to his First, who had asked the question and was even now watching them intently. His hands were raised as though he wasn’t sure whether it would be wiser to interfere or to let events run their course.

Those lines made me ache. It's so obvious that they are headed for something good; perhaps something as strong, in it's own way, as what the original Kirk and Spock had. I eagerly await more!

[ragdoll987]

They are definitely headed somewhere verrrrry interesting; this story is a fine balance in characters, because I love all three men in this "triangle", but they're all so different... even the two Spock's are different and it's been one of my greatest challenges so far writing two versions of the same man somehow differently, but similarly enough that it's REAL.

[schizo_niko]

Amazing as always. I absolutely love the presence of older Spock, and everything is flowing very naturally and the characters are spot-on. :)

Also, the line "Vulcan mind whammies" still has me giggling.

[ragdoll987]

Omg, I couldn't resist the mind whammy! Squee!