The Kestrel is such a compendium of fucked-up things that happen in war that it was hard to think of any incident that hadn't actually happened in canon
Ha! Very true.
That scene you added last does definitely tie things together in a way that works. I think that by putting it first you also establish with the audience your filial relationship to the text, since that Florian/Justin dialogue seems as if it were lifted verbatim from a page in an alternate universe's novel.
Let it be said that a late-on pinch hit can be right up the recipient's alley anyway! Even if the poor volunteer ends up pummeling her brains terribly to make it happen. The Excedrin is in the mail.
I'm glad I took it, though; I do like the story NOW and it was a valuable lesson in not giving up when things seem hopeless, no, really. So thanks for your deceptively and fiendishly difficult request!
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Ha! Very true.
That scene you added last does definitely tie things together in a way that works. I think that by putting it first you also establish with the audience your filial relationship to the text, since that Florian/Justin dialogue seems as if it were lifted verbatim from a page in an alternate universe's novel.
Let it be said that a late-on pinch hit can be right up the recipient's alley anyway! Even if the poor volunteer ends up pummeling her brains terribly to make it happen. The Excedrin is in the mail.
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