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FIC: The Voice in Your Head May Not Be God-It Could Just Be Slammin' Sammy Meade

Oct 26, 2007 11:28

Title: The Voice in Your Head May Not Be God-It Could Just Be Slammin' Sammy Meade
Author: rachel_wilder
Rating: T (aka PG-13)
Disclaimer: All characters who appear in these stories belong to their respective creators, including Imagine Entertainment, NBC Universal Television Studio and Film 44.
Summary: A post-ep for 2.3. Written for fnl_laundrylist challenge #13. Someone ( Read more... )

fan fiction, friday night lights, fnl laundry list

Comments 15

shelbecat October 26 2007, 17:14:29 UTC

First of all, killer title. I love it.

"You got anything else to say, Street?" the coach asked.

"Yeah," Jason replied. "I quit."

I like the abruptness of this. Jason had a little speech (he would), but then he just throws this in Coach's face. That's Jason perfectly.

People in glass houses shouldn't throw rocks.

Tim looked over at the silent television. It was his subconscious. He knew it.

Turnabout is fair play, Timmy Riggins.

"Are you allowed to mock me?" Tim asked out loud. "Aren't you supposed to comfort me and take up my burdens?"

Tim's version of talking to God is fabulous. Looking at the TV! But I like that there is a seriousness here. Tim can be serious and really think about the meaning of his actions. He's not so irresponsible that he doesn't think he's accountable for his own actions. Maybe he gives himself too much accountability. The "just take it...take it from me" is spot-on Riggins.

'Cause I'm not smart like Lyla and I'm not smooth with the ladies like you. I'm Jason Street and I could throw a ( ... )

rachel_wilder October 26 2007, 20:02:12 UTC

I write fic to get your feedback...and now I just wish I ended the story earlier!

And you will love Jason. You will.

shelbecat October 26 2007, 20:10:29 UTC

As you should, as you should.

As for ending the fic earlier - maybe you need a better beta ;)

rachel_wilder October 26 2007, 20:11:17 UTC

Yeah, I've been trying to figure out how to cut her loose.

Thread 5

devilc October 26 2007, 19:43:40 UTC

God, I wish the current episodes would be this insightful and well written.

Three different prompts and you blended them so seamlessly.

And this bit -- "Forgive me," he whispered. "Forgive me for not stopping that tackle. For not being there for Jay. For being there for Lyla. For not wanting Billy to have what I can't. Just take this…take it from me. I can't carry the burden any longer." broke my damn heart.

But this bit -- Tim didn't know about any doctor in Mexico and what he could or couldn't do to help Jason, but he knew that he hadn't been able to get across that field last season. He didn't know if he could ever forget what had happened, but he could drive this truck with the funny gear stuff on the column down to Mexico and give Jay the best chance at a normal life since that kid hit him a year ago. kissed it better.

Timmy has so much love in his heart. So. Much. Love.

rachel_wilder October 26 2007, 20:03:34 UTC

God, I wish the current episodes would be this insightful and well written.

Don't make my head explode!

As much as I love Jason, I love Tim thinking about Jason even more...Jason has this friendship with Tim, but he expects it. Tim has this friendship with Jason, but he treasures it.

devilc October 26 2007, 20:46:18 UTC

Jason has this friendship with Tim, but he expects it. Tim has this friendship with Jason, but he treasures it.

Best description of them, ever.

rachel_wilder October 26 2007, 20:55:14 UTC

I think I may have to start a PhD in Television Studies just so I can write my dissertation on this topic.

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rachel_wilder October 26 2007, 20:45:20 UTC

Love your icon--I need more poignant Tim/Jason icons.

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rachel_wilder October 26 2007, 20:44:52 UTC

Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed it and I really appreciate that you took the time to let me know.

Now if only I could actually get a challenge in for the deadline. 1407graymalkin October 27 2007, 02:58:18 UTC

I have to go with shelbecat awesome title. I love the smoothness of the piece (and how well it works with this episode). I love all the little circles the piece goes in and how it all interconnects.

Also, thank you thank you thank you for dealing with what Jason told his momma.

Re: Now if only I could actually get a challenge in for the deadline. rachel_wilder October 27 2007, 13:25:54 UTC

I need to work on that Joanne icon--girl needs her own picture.

That title was the first thing that came to me on this piece. It's usually not that way! And I'm so glad you liked it. I actually talked quite a bit with a friend of mine about this whole scenario where Jason loses football again so that informed where the story went.