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rabidchild

WC Fic: Steal My Body Home, Part 2/2

Oct 23, 2013 13:59

Steal My Body Home, Part 2

Part 1

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pooh_collector October 24 2013, 05:24:41 UTC

I'm pretty sure my heart is broken.

Yup, definitely broken.

This was the sweetest, most sentimental (in the good way) thing I've read in a long time.

I loved Neal's mom. At first I was thinking, it's not plausible that Neal would walk away from a mom this wonderful. But you made it completely plausible and you made her a complete pip.

Now, I need timestamps with Neal and his mom in NYC. Pretty please!

rabidchild October 24 2013, 17:43:28 UTC

Trust me, I thought she was too cool to leave too, but Neal can be so stubborn sometimes...

So glad you liked it.

caseyf123 October 24 2013, 05:30:08 UTC

Great story. My heart just about stopped when I got the first inkling Neal was "sick". I'm so glad his mom was still alert enough to be there for him. I loved the scene in the hospital with him smiling as she produced the plastic pig and booped his nose with the pom pom. Sweet ending to a heart wrenching story. Nice job!

rabidchild October 24 2013, 17:44:02 UTC

D'awww... thanks so much!

pipilj October 24 2013, 08:03:46 UTC

Lovely story, loved the way u seemlesly u alternate between the past and present. I am glad Neal had a loving mother, Neal learning slight of hand from her was so cute. Loved the scene after the surgery ♥♥♥

rabidchild October 24 2013, 17:44:45 UTC

In a lot of ways, Neal owes a lot more to his mother for the man he became than Vincent Adler

joy2190 October 25 2013, 02:00:17 UTC

Oh, such a lovely story you have here. I especially like that Neal learned his slight of hand from his mom and that she could still make him smile with it. I do hope the show goes down the reconciliation route for them too. Thanks

rabidchild October 26 2013, 13:04:02 UTC

Thanks! I wanted to show that he got more from her than he realized.

miri_thompson October 25 2013, 02:03:42 UTC

Gorgeous story. What a different take on Neal's mom than we usually see--I'm glad for this view of her as a largely positive presence in Neal's early life. And I love that Neal's reunion with her, and her struggles, helps Neal end his fear and helped him decide whether or not to risk the operation. Well done!

rabidchild October 26 2013, 13:05:11 UTC

Thanks! I'm happy that the connection between Neal's health issues and his mother's was clear - I was doubtful that I made it explicit enough.