The Ghost Belonged to Me (Hikaru no Go, 2/4)

[aishuu]

The Ghost Belonged to Me
~ A Hikaru no Go Fanfiction ~
by aishuuPairing: Akira/Hikaru, eventually

Comments

[tarigwaemir]

I didn't remember to comment on the first part, but I really wanted to tell you how much I love the tone of this fic. It's quiet, yet deeply emotional, like Akira himself. It's not easy to write in first person, but you really capture Akira's voice, both the intense love he feels for his father and the strength of mind he has to keep himself going despite his grief. And of course I have no end of admiration for the fact that you were able to write something like Blind Go and start a fic as wonderful as this at the same time. ^_^

[aishuu]

I seem to like Akira in first person; I'm not sure why. I think Akira is a hard character to write since he doesn't emote as much as Hikaru.

[sarasusa]

Waah! Poor Akira. (and poor Akira-mama.) But I love his conversation with his dad in this chapter--a comforting exchange.

[aishuu]

I think a lot of the exchanges are comforting. I'm trying to imagine what I'd want to hear, if I was in a similar situation.

[tekalynn]

This is beautiful and I LOVE the father-son dream(?) conversation. Very understated, natural, and touching.

The last section is a sad little twist--his mother is undoubtedly doing what's best for her, but it does underscore their distance as well as their unspoken affection.

[aishuu]

Akiko is one of those characters I'd like to someday explore as a person in her own right, not just a wife and a mother.

I'm glad the understatement is working well for you. ^_^ I'm trying to avoid a WALLOW of despair and maddening grief.

[issen4]

Loved the scene between Akira and his father. What you said about parents loving their children--beautiful. And the scene between Akira and his mother, set immediately he and his father had revealed that they mean more to each other than Go, resonated with me as well. His mother doesn't get it, and it's because just as with Touya Kouyo, they don't say it either. Poor Akiko.

[aishuu]

I think the next scene will show a bit more of what Akiko is doing; I don't think she's being selfish. I do think she, like Kouyo, wants what is best for her son.

[tekalynn]

I like the little details like go stone imprints on the face. You must have had to do considerable research into Japanese funeral customs!

Awww, Akira...Shindou really *does* know what you're going through!

[aishuu]

Tons and tons of research on the customs; I had to rewrite the first two parts to get them right - thank goodness I'm done with that.

And Shindou does know, although Akira won't know that.