A Fair and Even Trade (drabble, XXXHolic/Naruto)

[aishuu]

Title: A Fair and Even Trade
Author: aishuu
Fandoms: XXXholic and Naruto (and hints of Harry Potter)
Rated: G
Disclaimer: XXXholic is CLAMP's, Naruto belongs to Kishimoto.
Prompt 87 - Choice - at crossovers100
Claim: CLAMP
Wordcount: 100 even

Comments

[satora_chan]

What I love about this piece is that I can see Sasuke doing this - he knows the consequences that will occur because of his actions, but he goes ahead anyway.

Concrit: "You all will forget their memories of your most precious person." This sentence feels very awkward. I think it's the use of "their."

[aishuu]

Possessives can get strange. Changed it to "your."

Glad you liked this - I think it's a very Sasuke thing to do, making a decision that affects everyone.

[lady_addiction]

Very nice! For a short piece, it has a lot of impact and it's something that's really plausible given Sasuke's character.

[aishuu]

Glad you liked. Sasuke's egotism leads him to this kind of thinking, I believe.

[goruden_kombi]

Ah, yes, Sasuke would most likely pay such a toll for power. It's all about his goal, his determined purpose. Awesome! What a perfect cross-over.

[aishuu]

Glad you enjoyed this. I think Sasuke would have to come to value his teammates more than himself for this kind of set up to come to pass.

[vpatrician]

Perfect. Sasuke is cold-blooded but has learned from past experiences. This fic may only be 100 words but it's really powerful and believable.

[aishuu]

Drabbles are interesting in that every word counts. Sometimes it distills the work to its essense. Glad you enjoyed this.

[peridots13]

I can definitely see Sasuke doing this. I wonder, without his memories of Naruto, the only thing left holding him to humanity, will he become a new Orochimaru?

[aishuu]

...it might be better for him (yeah, i think he'll forget naruto to, sakura will forget him, and naruto will forget sakura just to be poetic). his jealousy of naruto really propelled him along his path.