Brightly Burning (Hikago, 12/?)

[aishuu]

Brightly Burning
~ A Hikaru no Go Alternate Universe ~
by aishuu
Disclaimers: Hotta and Obata. Shonen Jump. Not Mine.
Summary: In a different world, Hikaru never steps into Touya Kouyo's salon. When he is fifteen, the Go world starts to take notice of a terrifying new insei with amazing strength.
Notes: Earlier parts of Brightly Burning are located here

Comments

[jamfase]

First post! :O

*cheers at the update* This is such a great chapter. I love all the different perspectives you move through, and the way you write Hikaru shines as always.

I have to say, though, the introduction between Yashiro and Hikaru was my favorite part--even if Hikaru can't get his name right. ^^;; (I did note, though--and you'll have to forgive me for this, it's so minor--that you included an 'u' consistently at the end of Yashiro's name; unless I'm mistaken, the 'o' sound in Yashiro's name is short, not long.)

As always, I await the next chapter--especially now since you've brought up the Hokuto cup. <3

[aishuu]

Finding Hikaru from different perspectives is why this piece is so challenging to write - for while there's a general "he's an idiot savant" flare to it, there's still differences between characters.

I've always used "ou" as endings - comes from being in the fandom before romanization was more standardized (Ahhh, the Ryoga/Ryouga debates... I'm showing my age....). I admit, it's probably wrong...

[uminohikari]

but the results would be out three weeks ahead of theactual tournament.
Missing a space between the and actual? ^^;;

Whatever he was after - and Waya would give his right-arm to figure that out - wasn't the same as what the majority of professionals.
There needs to be something like 'were after' at the end of the sentence; otherwise, it compares what Shindou wants and the majority of the pros (but not what they want). Er. I don't think I explained that well? >>

shielding them with his hand to keep the other many from seeing
..the other many?

Ohmygod, there are so many lines I absolutely adore in this chapter! I love how you ened each of the sections, and that you used the words 'old fogy', and Waya's voice, which was brilliant.
♥!!!!

[aishuu]

Thanks, I'll tweak on the final.

I'm glad you found this amusing - I have to admit, the old fogy made me laugh while writing it.

[mmmdraco]

This hit the spot after a long day. ^_^ You know this is one of my favorite fics that you write, and this is doing so much to flesh out the characters for me. You're wonderful. *grin*

[aishuu]

Glad to hear this made your day a bit brighter - we need to chat again soon. I miss talking to you.

[mars_bars_xp]

Hooray!
A update! It was worth the wait!
I can't wait for the next one!

[aishuu]

We'll try for sooner than five months!!

[yukiko07]

OH MY GOD!!!! A New chapter!!!!!!

To think I´ve been reading this fic since you posted the first chapter in FFnet. I´t doesn´t really feel like it was that long ago =D

I adored Hikaru and Yashiro`s interaction in this chapter. I also liked a lot Waya´s and Saeki´s thoughts on this. Hahahaha, now that the Hokuto Cup if starting, I can´t wait to see how Hikaru and Ko Yeong Ha meeting is going to be XD

Hmmm, thinking about Wayas comment about touya and Hikaru, taking in count this fic is supposed to be a Hikaru X Akira (still very far off right?) I can´t help but wonder what will make Hikaru take real notice of him. Though I do like the fact that their roles are kind of reversed in this fic. Hehehehe I shall keep reading and see ^_^

[aishuu]

I think it's going on five years, which is scary when you think on it.

Hikaru and Ko Yeong Ha will meet, but it won't be next chapter. He has to get through the Cup first.

It is a Hika/Aki/Hika fic, I'll get there. "Trust the narrator."