Captive Voice (8)

[nashidesei]

Title: Captive Voice
Fandom: Jak and Daxter (Jak II)
Rating: M
Pairing: Erol/Jak
Warnings: Torture, Extreme Violence, Implied Rape, Attempted Suicide.
Chapter: 8/13
Notes: Superfast update, because I'm feeling gloomy and I know you awesome reviewer-type folks will make it all better. I’m going to stop talking about chapter length or I’ll just

Comments

[demishock]

Number one

[weiila]

Whoooa, read it with one eye closed. Meep O_o But the bits where Jak fought back against Erol were powerful as hell, both the physical and the mental one.

Am I a bad person for snerking at the female experiment that died? That made me think of all the dark-eco-enhanced Mary Sues invading the fandom, and here was finally a possible one that went down in the way they ALL SHOULD.

And yes, yes, I saw the Daxter reference, I did, I DID. There's a light at the end of the tunnel, eh?

[nashidesei]

Thank you very much! I'm glad the Erol Fights seem to have come out as strong as I was hoping--this is where Jak and Erol start being evenly matched, and from here on out they both get to be scared of each other. XD

I was hoping someone would catch on to the dead Sue--although she did throw out a couple of Jak 3 spoilers before she kicked it, if you know how to look. I'm more than sick of the slew of "Female Dork Dark Warriors" plaguing the fandom, and that part was written after a particularly traumatic swim through the Pit. *shudders at the memories*

The Daxter reference was hard to work in--blasted Erol doesn't want to be on the same planet as the little guy--but weird. I mean, I knew Dax was an exterminator--you can't really be in this fandom without knowing at least a sliver of Daxter-canon--but the fact that he actually got into the prison using his occupation is something that sort of makes me quirk my head to one side.

I'm really glad you liked it, though! I t really means a lot to me. ^_^