Another commentfic, 'cause I can.timeofnoreplyMarch 5 2010, 03:21:48 UTC
Brad is in the middle of sucking Ray's dick, hands resting on Ray's hips, when Ray arches his back. Brad knows what this means, is preparing for a good ten seconds of swallowing, is readying himself for the slightly metallic-salty taste of come in his mouth, but he's wholly taken aback by what pops out of Ray's mouth as he succumbs to shuddering orgasm.
"Oh, holy jesus motherfuck, daddy," Ray gasps, nearly tearing holes in the cheap plaid Wal-Mart sheets he'd brought home one afternoon, ignoring Brad's protests of how fucking ugly they were in favor of the it-was-on-sale argument. Ray usually wins those, even though he's always the one calling Brad a cheap Jew.
It's enough to make Brad screech to a halt, and he almost chokes before finally making the conscious effort to swallow. He stares up at Ray from between his legs. "What the fuckRay almost misses it, melting into the pillows and going floppy-limbed with satisfaction. "What the fuck is what
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Re: Another commentfic, 'cause I can.queeniegaloreMarch 5 2010, 11:26:18 UTC
Oh my god. I just...OH my GOD.
I made the mistake of checking my emails on my phone while shopping on my lunch break, and I just STOPPED DEAD in the middle of the sock section of Target and tried not to have an ACTUAL ORGASM in front of people because that line of Ray's was THAT. FUCKING. HOT.
And when I got over THAT I sat down and read the rest of it and LOVED it because the dialogue is so funny and spot on :D YOU need to stop being a big old tease and actually write me, like, three thousand words of detailed Brad/Ray daddy-kink porn. I never knew I needed it until you come along so really, you're OBLIGATED.
I see your daddy-kink porn and raise you...queeniegaloreMarch 5 2010, 21:01:42 UTC
I have to leave for work in like, twenty minutes but I was up all night thinking of this, so...
Brad buried himself deep into Ray and paused, just pressed inside without moving. "Brad," Ray hissed, trying to push back on him, "Come on, come on..."
Brad hauled him up, until Ray's back was pressed against his chest, both of them on their knees. He fisted a hand in Ray's short hair and pulled his head back. "Say it."
Ray's breath stuttered, eyes falling closed. He went still and tense, and Brad couldn't help himself, he pumped forwards a few times, making Ray whimper, and then stopped again. Ray moaned in frustration.
"Say it, Ray, or I'm leaving you here to finish yourself off."
Ray licked his lips. "Fuck me," he whispered. Brad stroked his neck, rubbed a thumb over his lips. "Jesus, please, fuck me, daddy."
Brad's dick twitched, the words sending a jolt of pure pleasure through his body. He pulled harder on Ray's hair, put his lips to Ray's ear and whispered, "Good boy.And Ray just came apart around him, his orgasm ripping
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Re: Another commentfic, 'cause I can.queeniegaloreMarch 9 2010, 08:39:11 UTC
Ray clearly needs discipline and Brad is such a dom.
YESSSSSSSS. Why aren't there, like, twenty million fics exploring this idea? Brad being a mouthy little smartass and Brad getting all alpha on him and putting him in his place.
ACTUALLY. There's one great Brad/Ray/Nate where they BOTH go kinda dom on Ray. There needs to be more of THAT.
Re: Another commentfic, 'cause I can.queeniegaloreMarch 9 2010, 09:05:03 UTC
Yeah, Ray getting inside Brad's guard, up where he can feel it, until Brad just lets himself go and gives them BOTH what they want. Finally letting himself loose for a change because he knows it's RAY and Ray can take it...
And yeah, that's the one I meant. I had this whole big thing where I realised it was EXACTLY my perfect porn - threesomes, dom/sub, dirty talk, that is basically my holy trinity of smut.
There's Stark/Alex out there, which I haven't read, but I've never seen any Pj/Alex. Which sucks, because that commentary they did together just proves they have giant man-crushes on each other.
AND YES. Have you SEEN it? I saw a gif and I couldn't look PJ in the face for DAYS.
Re: Another commentfic, 'cause I can.queeniegaloreMarch 9 2010, 09:18:16 UTC
Damnit, I can't find it! I thought it was in that one epic PJ post on ONTD a little while back but I just spent forever going through it and I couldn't see it.
BUT YES, Ken Park (which I haven't seen), he jerks off on screen. It's...something.
"Oh, holy jesus motherfuck, daddy," Ray gasps, nearly tearing holes in the cheap plaid Wal-Mart sheets he'd brought home one afternoon, ignoring Brad's protests of how fucking ugly they were in favor of the it-was-on-sale argument. Ray usually wins those, even though he's always the one calling Brad a cheap Jew.
It's enough to make Brad screech to a halt, and he almost chokes before finally making the conscious effort to swallow. He stares up at Ray from between his legs. "What the fuckRay almost misses it, melting into the pillows and going floppy-limbed with satisfaction. "What the fuck is what ( ... )
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I made the mistake of checking my emails on my phone while shopping on my lunch break, and I just STOPPED DEAD in the middle of the sock section of Target and tried not to have an ACTUAL ORGASM in front of people because that line of Ray's was THAT. FUCKING. HOT.
And when I got over THAT I sat down and read the rest of it and LOVED it because the dialogue is so funny and spot on :D YOU need to stop being a big old tease and actually write me, like, three thousand words of detailed Brad/Ray daddy-kink porn. I never knew I needed it until you come along so really, you're OBLIGATED.
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Brad buried himself deep into Ray and paused, just pressed inside without moving. "Brad," Ray hissed, trying to push back on him, "Come on, come on..."
Brad hauled him up, until Ray's back was pressed against his chest, both of them on their knees. He fisted a hand in Ray's short hair and pulled his head back. "Say it."
Ray's breath stuttered, eyes falling closed. He went still and tense, and Brad couldn't help himself, he pumped forwards a few times, making Ray whimper, and then stopped again. Ray moaned in frustration.
"Say it, Ray, or I'm leaving you here to finish yourself off."
Ray licked his lips. "Fuck me," he whispered. Brad stroked his neck, rubbed a thumb over his lips. "Jesus, please, fuck me, daddy."
Brad's dick twitched, the words sending a jolt of pure pleasure through his body. He pulled harder on Ray's hair, put his lips to Ray's ear and whispered, "Good boy.And Ray just came apart around him, his orgasm ripping ( ... )
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Fucking bitch, now I'm writing a proper fic. When it's finished, I'm dedicating/blaming it on you.
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... guh. Just... yeah.
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YESSSSSSSS. Why aren't there, like, twenty million fics exploring this idea? Brad being a mouthy little smartass and Brad getting all alpha on him and putting him in his place.
ACTUALLY. There's one great Brad/Ray/Nate where they BOTH go kinda dom on Ray. There needs to be more of THAT.
Reply
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And yeah, that's the one I meant. I had this whole big thing where I realised it was EXACTLY my perfect porn - threesomes, dom/sub, dirty talk, that is basically my holy trinity of smut.
There's Stark/Alex out there, which I haven't read, but I've never seen any Pj/Alex. Which sucks, because that commentary they did together just proves they have giant man-crushes on each other.
AND YES. Have you SEEN it? I saw a gif and I couldn't look PJ in the face for DAYS.
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BUT YES, Ken Park (which I haven't seen), he jerks off on screen. It's...something.
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