[KH] - Equal & Opposite Reactions (Xigbar/Xaldin) (Part II)

[quakewithfear]

            When Xaldin rose again, the first thing he saw was Xigbar crouched over the two bodies on the table, his face deep in Roxas’ remaining chest cavity.  He grunted as he pushed himself to his feet and glared at the cannibal.

“Xigbar, give me one good reason why I shouldn’t kill you right now.”

“’cause you won’t

Comments

[diety_of_sorrow]

Did I have to read part one first, or something?

As a stand alone peice, though, I really liked this. Ocould seeAxel vomiting. Hee. All he'd have to do is burn it, but ...eh.I think I'd freeze, too.

Impressive imagery. So Xigbar and Vexen got away? =O

Impressive work! *thumbs up*

[quakewithfear]

It's recommended that you read part one first, but not neccessary. ^^;; I thought I put a big link for part one up at the top, but I guess it wasn't big enough. I put another one up there, just in case.

Yes, Axel COULD have burned it, but that would be killing Roxas! Er... half of Roxas.

First comment AGAIN! I should really award you a prize.

[diety_of_sorrow]

The banter between Xaladin, Xigbar and Vexen is truly awesome in the first one, I have to give you that. =D

And hee! I just have a knack for replying first, I spose. <3

They flow together very well, with little to now 'so what happened' between 1 and 2. =D

Anyway. *rolls away*

[yakunitatanai]

...... Holy shit, that's like... sad! Roxas is calling out to him and he's disgusted! Oh, no! Oh, no!!!!

AND XALDIN! *tears up* Oh, Xaldin...

You, my doll, have a sick mind. And I think I love it. Yes. Yes I do.

[quakewithfear]

*laugh* Well, Sora's in there too. It's both of them, but I guess it's the parts that are left of Roxas. It is kind of sad, really.

I wasn't expecting people to feel bad about Xaldin, but I'm glad they do! He's such a great character and gets shafted all the time.

^_^ Thank you for reading.

[yakunitatanai]

I LOVE Xaldin. He just rocked. I loved the entire Organization, honestly. It makes me sad whenever they die. XD

Either way, it's very sad with Axel and Roxas. And now the Roxas bits can FEEL rejection.

[anansay]

Woah.
I read this backward, and yet it still made sense. I liked trying to figure out what happened in the first part, before the carnage, where the blood had come from, etc. And then I realized, "Oh, shit there IS a first part!" So, then I read that too.
I only became squeamish when Xigbar ate the eyeball. That's it. The rest was . . . very interesting.

One thing, read the first sentence of the second part. I had to read it three times to figure out that the second "Xaldin" should have been "Xigbar". Those two names got me confused throughout the entire thing because they just LOOK similar. OF course, I had two other tabs open on pics of either so I could continuously reorient myself visually with who was who. *G*

This was so cool to read! I really enjoyed it. Especially mindfuckingly wicked was Sora's and Roxas' voice coming from the same creature, in a back-n-forth dichotomy of sound. Sweet!

This is going to haunt for a while, I'll bet. Just the very idea of it--!

[quakewithfear]

Ah, I went back and fixed that sententce - thank you for pointing it out. I'm usually pretty good about not mixing up the names, but sometimes it's hard, especially when they're so similar. I hope that it wasn't TOO confusing, though!

Mm. I liked the alternating voices as well. I had a lot of fun with being as gross as possible with the creature and using a bunch of cool concepts. I'm glad you enjoyed them as well. *grin*

Thank you so much for reading and commenting! ^_^

[anansay]

It was only confusing in that I was having trouble keeping Xaldin and Xigbar straight in my own head, due the similarity in their names. And I can understand how writing it would be hard too, with the similarities.

You definitely made the creature as inhumane as could be, especially in the second part. :P

[marchwarden23]

*flails about in ecstasy*
You have a way with imagery that not only conjure up a series of delicious pictures, but burn them into my mind for days after. I'm enchanted, enraptured, aching for more. The dynamic between them is all high strung nerves and anticipation, all of them wanting the end result to be a success for different reasons. So well done.

Axel is scarred forever now. Poor baby.
...
But...but...
Xaldin.
*weeps bitterly*

I'm thinking he needs to be the next experiment with some whip-stitching and the syringe full of Eau de Kingdom Hearts.

I've noticed that your further efforts to squick just make me go *squee* and a little shiver of joy runs up and down my spine. Just saying. Carry on, you wonderful darling, you.

[quakewithfear]

*laugh* I made someone flail! Hooray!

As a writer of stories that are intended to be very visual and squicky, it's wonderful to hear that my writing accomplishes the goal of sticking with people! I really enjoyed writing this story (Yes, even though I had to kill of Xaldin) so I'm glad that people are enjoying it as well.

There may actually be a continuation of this at some point in the future, althogh it's currently undecided... A friend of mine kept giving me ideas for the aftermath of all this, so we'll just have to see.

^_^ Thanks again for reading. Readers like you are what make writing fanfiction fun!

[marchwarden23]

YES! I know what you mean! I've been told similar things about my writing. I love to pay attention to little details and it turns out that when people comment, they take note of how they can "see" things perfectly and the stories have a very visual element to them. *dead chuffed*

I certainly hope you continue this storyline as it's captured my attention thoroughly. Consider me a fan. ;) And I have to say that it is writers like you who challenge societal norms and write about subjects that are generally considered unacceptable that make the writing world have a little more dimension, a little more creativity, and a whole fuckload of awesome.
Thank you for sharing your writing.

[eleventh_end]

Oh Mickey. DDD:

I just re-read all of part one. During the second half of that, I started crying. Mostly because I'm way, way too sensitive to read about Xigbar eating Sora's eye while he was still alive. (But do I care? Naaaah, your writing is totally worth it.)

I continued on to part two. Everything was going well, more action than eating-still-alive-people... and then Xaldin is decapitated. And then Axel walks in. It was about that point when I started out-right sobbing.

And all I can say afterwards is, "Holy shit, I hope she writes a third part."

Thank you so much for writing this. I'm pretty much forcing myself past my limit, but I really, really don't care. I love stories that draw me in enough to cause me emotional distress, let alone the characters. Things like this are so incredibly rare in this fandom

[quakewithfear]

Good grief, I was expecting all kinds of reactions to this, but I have to say that I hadn't expected to make anyone cry. O_o;;

But I'm so flattered that you continued to read this even when it was making you so upset! That really means a lot to me that you'd be so dedicated. It just means that I have the best readers ever! It also makes me happy to know that my writing is able to affect someone so strongly - it means a lot to know that I'm capable of getting the emotion across. Thank you so much!

As for a third part... I hadn't initailly planned to write one, but there's been a lot of demand (as well as some really awesome suggestions) so I may actually make this ongoing. If there ends up being a part three, it won't be up for a while since I need to focus on some other things right now (Hollow Bastion Restoration Committee, Bad Affection, etc).

*blush* You guys are too awesome. Again, thank you for reading, even though it upset you so much! (And your mom!) I hope the nightmares aren't too bad! ^^;;