Great Plains High School AU: Chapter Six

[alien_writings]

trigger warning for graphic depiction of [click to reveal]rape -- NSFW

---------Breccan browsed the tiny fiction section of the school library, hoping for a suitable distraction from recent events. Even now, as he scanned the well-worn volumes, he couldn’t help thinking of Egan. Normally, he would talk to Finbar when something bothered him, but he suspected his

Comments

[theun4givables]

Oh, Breccan. You and Savin could have a lot to talk about, when it comes to your personal experiences with Egan. I'm sure they could both benefit from talking to other kids who have been traumatized by the gods.

Nico -- Nico, good for you for getting Mr. Hathaway. And yay, Gemma punching him in the face -- even if unfortunately for her that'll come back to bite her in the ass, I'm sure.

I'm afraid you might be taking Nico's change of heart a little too fast. Like I almost feel that he should be disturbed and not really understand why/even brushing off what he saw, instead of being completely horrified by it like he was. Like it should bother him, but not quite to the extent that you have him doing so, here.

[alien_writings]

There should be a support group or something for all the poor kids who've had "encounters" with the gods. Those two are really awful, but at least Nico gets some points for (starting on) redeeming himself?

While Gemma's face-punching was extremely well-deserved, sadly, it WILL come and bite her in the ass. That said, while it might bite her, she'll bite back, along with Jazz and Savin and probably Lynie.

I edited the chapter to include your concrit, so maybe Nico's change of heart is a little more realistic now? What do you think?

[theun4givables]

It does feel more realistic now, that way. It at least feels a lot better than before. :)