Fiction.

Jul 23, 2005 02:38

Intro here; Chapter one here.

chapter two )

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scarletasset July 23 2005, 07:38:04 UTC
Wow.

Nice ending.

You always keep me wanting more.
The party, Adam's character, what will happen with Gabe...everything.

Your character Claire is really unique. A person I don't think I have encountered, or read about.
It is intriguing.

The only criticism I can give is that you misspelled some things. Not in a way like you don't know how to spell them, just common errors.

Nice job, can't wait for more.

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quaaludes July 23 2005, 23:24:58 UTC
Thank you so much, the comments really mean a lot.
Ah, I know about the spelling errors. Whenever I write it's the middle of the night and my typing gets sloppy. I'll go through it again and check everything over.
Thanks again. :]

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lily_954 July 23 2005, 08:03:49 UTC
i made a face when he said he had a girlfriend. like the first comment, you do have nice endings and keep me wanting to read more. i don't have any proper criticism for you though cause i like it all :)

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quaaludes July 23 2005, 23:26:22 UTC
Haha, yeah, my friend read about the girlfriend part and she said she started crying.
She's getting really involved in it, it's cool that I have so much support from people on it.
Thanks again. :]

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lindyfu July 23 2005, 12:21:02 UTC
OKAY, finished reading it. i honestly don't know how great my opinion is considering i never read, but i loved it. it gets up and going just fast enough to keep me interested. that's mostly why i never read, nothing can keep me and my short attention span. but yeah, it actually kind of motivated me to read. haha, i live across the street from borders book store and i'm gonna go find something to read tomorrow. way to go, hannah:)

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quaaludes July 23 2005, 23:25:47 UTC
I'm glad I've motivated you! Thank you so so much, if you ever want any book suggestions I know some great ones, so just ask. Thanks again Lindy, you're the best. :]

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lindyfu July 24 2005, 00:25:09 UTC
i'd love some suggestions!

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quaaludes July 24 2005, 06:16:30 UTC
Well, some of my favourites are ( ... )

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labyrinthes July 23 2005, 19:35:19 UTC
Wow, I love this.
I'm so glad you're posting it because at the moment I don't have a good book to read and this is just as good.

And I'm in no place to give criticism because I'm a horrible writer, but even if I was I wouldn't even have any to give because I think it's great.

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quaaludes July 23 2005, 23:27:11 UTC
Ah, thank you. I'm glad I'm motivating people to read or something, or maintain interested in literature because for a super-long time I hated reading but then I found some great books and got back into writing and now it pretty much rules my life haha.
Thanks again. :]

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quaaludes July 24 2005, 06:17:06 UTC
haha I hate him too!
I'll definitely be writing a ton more once summer school is FINALLY over.

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