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misskatieleigh January 26 2007, 14:37:23 UTC
I'll just be in the corner crying if anyone needs me.

so ........ SAD!

oh gosh.

poor Sammy and Dean *pets the boys*

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pyrebi January 26 2007, 16:28:21 UTC
*hands you a tissue* Sorry. This is why I shouldn't write at 1am, I guess. I tend to write horrible bad not-happy things.

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inimicallyyours January 26 2007, 16:50:49 UTC
#3: So stupid, thinking his world would ever be bigger than this.

#4: Good man, bad man, hard man that loved his family too much to actually love them.

#6: Doesn’t want to live forever. Just doesn’t want to die the way he thinks he’s gonna.

Do you have to make me cry? Because everyone one of these was so sad, and *so* Sam. *sniff*

Also, the three above, those sentences *made* the story for me, just, summed it all up. I can see that, see Sam thinking that he's never going to know more or see more than the limits of the car they ride in and how now, after John is dead, does he realize just how much he and his father had in common and how much John loved them. And yeah, yeah, as for the last one, that rings so true. Sam (and Dean) know that one day, they're going to be too slow, or move the wrong way and that's fine, that's going to have to be acceptable, because they're hunters. But to die by the demon, for whatever reason, that's terrifing and his nightmare come to life.

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pyrebi January 26 2007, 22:15:05 UTC
*hands you a tissue too* Sorry!

Oh, I'm so glad you liked, though. Like I said, this is my first time writing a serious post-Jess Sam. I was so worried I was gonna mess it up. And my writing style is usually so frank, too, so knowing I was able to express what I wanted to and that you understood it (and agreed!)...well, I feel like I could dance. Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

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inimicallyyours January 27 2007, 01:24:49 UTC
Sure thing; I can't wait to read the rest of the prompts, when you write them.

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ultraviolet9a January 26 2007, 17:50:35 UTC
Dear god. This is poetry/roadmovie all in one AND in a perfect ribbon. You got stream of consciousness and clipped sentences and such poetry in things we've all seen yet somehow...never combined like this. Like:

Last touch was a drop of blood. Just...the concept behind it, the word weaving...

I'm not sighing because it made my heart break (though it did), I'm sighing because this is god damn beautiful.

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pyrebi January 26 2007, 22:26:33 UTC
I...uh...wow. Um, thank you so much. Your lovely comment has honored me beyond words. I was truly worried that I was butchering a gorgeous style, and knowing that you think I did something right is so wonderful. Thank you again.

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ultraviolet9a January 26 2007, 22:41:14 UTC
No butchering. :) And you're welcome.

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hossgal January 27 2007, 04:24:38 UTC
So stupid, thinking his world would ever be bigger than this.

There, that is where this set of stories owned me.

Very well done, sharply visualized slices of life. You've captured well the images and emotions of the show.

Of course, you damn near made me *cry* doing it, but we're not going to talk about that part.

- hossgal

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pyrebi February 11 2007, 10:10:51 UTC
Thank you for the lovely comment; I thought that bit in "sky" was one of my favorite, so hearing you point it out makes me giddy. I'm sorry for nearly making you cry...but I'm so happy you enjoyed reading it enough to comment! Thank you again!

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vaznetti January 28 2007, 13:17:32 UTC
These are just beautiful -- like a set of fragments of Sam's life, or something just about to fall into fragments. I really love them, Sam's growing understanding and his terror and his desperate bargaining with himself, with Dean, with the whole damn universe..

There's some lovely writing here -- here are just two of the lines i loved.

So stupid, thinking his world would ever be bigger than this.

The fall’s much longer than just the height he’s climbed.

Lovely.

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pyrebi February 11 2007, 10:14:58 UTC
Wow, thanks! That's exactly how I wanted it to be--fragments. If you didn't know our boys so well, these probably wouldn't make mush sense. I was really trying to get into Sam's head and write a story that made a bit of sense (as much as any being can make sense of the amorphous things that are thoughts). Thsnk you so much for taking the time to comment and tell me you liked my work. It means so very much to me.

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