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[pyracies]

TITLE: 11 Years Later
RATING: PG-13
PAIRING: Jack/Elizabeth, Will/Elizabeth (marriage implied)
SUMMARY: Back with the sixth part in this little series. Funny how that happens, I'd only intended to write a drabble, or two, at best. Really have to chalk the whole thing up to encouragement, and in some cases (I'm looking at you tephroliah) harassment, and

Comments

[n0_truth_at_all]

Yay! First comment =D I loved it, really did. Im glad you decided to continue this, even if it was by harrasssment :P It was great, I hope you contrinue it even further it has a great plot.

"Spirit's harder to fight, even still." He glances down at the gold band adorning her finger, "Though, I'd say you're doing remarkably well with that, wouldn't you?"

Classic.

[pyracies]

For some reason it makes me smile that someone would be happy about getting first comment on something I wrote. XD(!)

Thanks for the feedback, hon, I do intend to write more.

[sparrows_swann]

I love the idea of an older Jack and Elizabeth. I wanted to tell you that your older, wiser Elizabeth comes across REALLY welll. I really do like her in this fic. Her naivety and idealistic notions of life and love are gone and replaced by a more wordly, mature knowledge and you write her very well. The implication of Jack and Elizabeth now having a long friendship and bond comes across clearly as well.

[pyracies]

Oh, thank you. I believe in some cases, it's almost unconcious, because, I'm older now, and my own idealistic notions of life, and love are gone, and I think it comes through in my writing (the usefulness of relating to this girl). And I'm really glad the history of their relationship comes through, I didn't want overt sexuality, just yet, but I wanted to try and convey that they are, at this point, in an established, albeit horribly unconventional, "relationship" that dear William knows nothing about; don't know if that's obvious, but I hope so.

Thanks, again! ♥

[gea_luv]

I just finished reading the previous chapters (along with this one, of course) and I've seemed to have fallen in love! This is a wonderful story you have here; I especially love the thought of Elizabeth sneaking behind Will's back to be with Jack because, well, let's be honest: she's as coniving as they come, and Will will never be able to handle that.

You've nailed Jack's speech, by the way, very in character. Elizabeth, too.

She adjusts herself under the scrutiny of his hard stare, and with a slight shrug, walks to the ocean, casting her shoes and dress to sand, leaving him to take a seat next to her things, and watch with affectionate bemusement when, standing in the shallows, chemise hiked above her knees, she shrieks at the cold wave breaking over her bare legs, and makes to jump out of the way. For the fifth time in as many minutes, he steals a glance at his compass, and snaps it shut before looking in her direction, again.Absolutely beautiful imagery, nice thought, too. Gave me a wonderful picture and saddened me as well,

[pyracies]

Wow, I really adore detailed feedback. ♥ Will will never be able to handle that, especially from someone so insightful. That's exactly what I was going for. I've tried to make it abundantly clear that she does, in fact, love Will very much, but that he is no longer everything she needs, and that her dishonesty, if anything, is an attempt to not hurt him. At least that's her rationalization, between bouts with bitterness. Andddd, I'm very particular about my Jack! speak, so thankyouverymuch.

By the way, I am in love with your icon. I actually, I believe in the first chapter to this bit, referenced that scene, because the image was so beautiful I had to use it. It's the way her head is turned, not in, not away, not being held up, she's... resting against his chest, once again (as with the grabbing 'hold of his leg in the end of DMC), like... a child. So, yes, lovelovelove.

[gea_luv]

I apologize for the late reply (accidently missed the notification email)...

You're very welcome! I always find a good piece of work deserves a good piece of praise :)

I've tried to make it abundantly clear that she does, in fact, love Will very much, but that he is no longer everything she needs, and that her dishonesty, if anything, is an attempt to not hurt him.See that's what makes your story so wonderful because really, that's how Elizabeth's always been. The entire 'you can't trust me' conversation they had in AWE sums up their entire relationship. Sure, they love each other dearly, but sometimes love just isn't enough

[pyracies]

Steal as much of my time as you'd like, and fill it with insight, and actual love for these characters, and that is quite alright. I agree very muchly with your friend, people do, indeed, change over the course of a decade, and even though I'm sure as the days to his return got closer, she was happy, and giddy, and "Yay Will!" (because of her perfect memory, and sentimentality, etc) it probably didn't take long for her to realize just how much things had changed.

And even before hand, while he was gone, Elizabeth is not the sort of woman to sit around by herself and twiddle her thumbs, and the most likely candidate for keeping her busy, is, well, Jack. Frankly I don't see how things couldn't go this way, or at least similarly. As I don't think anyone would hold it against her if she decided, "you know, waiting around for ten years is bullshit". Not even Will, on some level, because he does love her.

Anyway, now I'm ranting.

[bigfoot24]

Beautifully written! I really like Jack and Elizabeth's interaction. Nice job.

[pyracies]

Thank you, thank you so much. :D

[tephroliah]

Sad around the edges. :{ Like neither of them really wants to dig too deep, not that they need to. Peas in a pod and whatnot. Will is a prat, and I am semi-coherent. Are you going to take this somewhere that doesn't culminate in an unresolved, angsty pseudo-cliffhanger? I hope so. Because I know that would be tempting, and real, but it's just too depressing. D:

[pyracies]

Funny thing about, ah, the... nature of my writing style... I've got no idea where it's gonna go.

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