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[pyracies]

TITLE: "Space" (or, an experiment in writing a non-obvious sex piece)
PAIRING: Jack & Elizabeth, duh.
RATING: R ..... (see AN)
AN: I'm'a say, though, the sexuality is subtle, so don't expect PWP. I wrote this as an exercise to see how I could write something painfully hot without using any of the obligatory situations &/or porno language... so, uh

Comments

[pyracies]

I didn't actually mean to comprise an entire vignette of allusions, but, somehow it happened. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[unnamed_paradox]

I think it's safe to say you succeeded admirably, m'dear! The wordplay, the use of allusions is just perfect.

[pyracies]

You, uh, get what I was gettin' @ right? That whole, um, how should I explain it..... female version of blue balls? Muscle contraction... aching negative space where.... somethings should be, but, aren't?

Cause that's what I was trying to put across, and I really couldn't think of a pretty way to explain it. But I know it's a feeling many a woman could attest to.

[unnamed_paradox]

Um, yeah...I know exactly what you mean!

[hereswith]

I've always enjoyed your writing, and this is lovely :-)

[pyracies]

Thank you. :)

[tiamary]

What a terribly sad fate for this Elizabeth. Might she have been better off if she never had sex with Jack so she'd never know what she was missing? Well written and thought-provoking; reads to me as character study rather than erotica.

[sparrows_lass]

O_O

wow...

so sweet...so bitter...so sad...