SS/RL Slash Fic: "On the Shores of Darkness" (NC-17) 3/3

[purpleygirl]

Part One here

Part Two here

Part Three

He occupies his mornings with tackling a little more of the dust accumulated over the years, the sad state of some of the furniture, the crockery, even the haphazard arrangement of Severus’s books. Remus does not read many of them, of course - he has never had any interest in Dark magic, and Severus

Comments

[nehalenia]

That was beautifully and subtly written. I very much enjoyed this.

[purpleygirl]

Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :)

[hogwartshoney]

I really enjoyed this! My heart clenched and hurt right along with Remus' at every slight he received, and when he and Severus discussed the wolf... and how they'd both been 'checking up on each other'... I squeed. I really did. My stomach did flippy-things when they finally did get past everything and could 'be' with each other. Nicely plotted out, nicely written, yep, yep. ;)

[purpleygirl]

Oh, squee! You know how much I admire your Fear and Blame fic. I totally owe the present tense of this to that. (In fact, I was halfway through it and had to rewrite the first half in present from past. *g*)

That's so nice of you to say that. Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :D

[hogwartshoney]

Squee in return! I really dug your present tense 'cause it seems to make everything much more 'immediate' ! ;o)

Oh, and this... "He growled as he buried himself in the scent of Severus." <---- *shhhhhhhhhhhhhivers delightedly* That sentence right there has enough 'nnngggghhhhh' in it to completely drive the point home! Thrusting home, in fact! *snerk*

(*is pervy*)

[purpleygirl]

Hee. Thank you! Understated porn = more left to readers' imagination = pervier. ;D

[dizilla]

*hee* I loved this. I shouldn't have read it during work but i did, so yay, it kept me through the day. XD I do love how you brought back that picture in the end and how they finally overcame their small fears to be with one another. Oh and the smutty parts were fabulous. Well done. =D

[purpleygirl]

*g* I'm happy to have kept you going through work! And I'm glad you liked the smutty parts - they're my first slash, in fact, and I did think they were tame by comparison with some, um, more experienced writers. LOL

[dizilla]

Heheh, sometimes tame is all we need in a good fic. Doesn't have to be all pornstar all the time. But yeah, fantastic for your first time. ^_^

[dizilla]

oops, that's me (i'm at work. XD)

[alestrel]

Most enjoyable. I wasn't sure, on starting to read, whether I was going to like it or not, but the wonderfully restrained, subtle style kept me reading to the end. Deftly written, and believable - even though I don't at all like the notion of a broken, submissive Remus, I can appreciate how he became that way, and was happy to see a measure of equality restored at the end.

[purpleygirl]

I see what you mean, and I did want to indicate that Remus did have his own way at least sometimes -- hence the table scene and the end. *grin*

Thank you so much for your comments on the style. I really felt writing in present tense was keeping it restrained. Kind of like forcing me to keep focused on the here and now, if you know what I mean.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

[jedirita]

OOOOOHHHHmygodohmygodohmygodohmygod! This is quite possibly my new most favoritest Snupin story ever! And that is really saying something

[purpleygirl]

Thank you so much for your lovely comments!! I'm so, so happy everything worked for you! *big grin*

I think you mean Stockholm Syndrome (though I think it goes by some other name as well). I can see that, definitely -- though as he's not completely a captive of Snape's here, I was thinking it was more like the Nightingale Effect? That's the one where the patient falls in love with the nurse. (Snape the nurse, LOL!) Yeah, maybe not... *grin*

And, wow, thank you for the rec on your lj! :D

(I'm glad that you didn't make it where they had secretly pined for each other as kids.)
Thank you! :) I wanted to see if I could bring them together with their history. As in canon history, not fanon history. ;)

"Make solicitude to me."
*grin* I couldn't resist, I'm afraid. Hee.

I'm just a big angst lover. What can I say? ;)

Thank you again for your beautiful, detailed comments. It's so lovely to see how everything worked for you! ::trying desperately not to squee herself to bits::

[jedirita]

Stockholm! Yes, that's what it's called. But Nightingale works too. Or just sheer animal magnestism.

By the way, I loved this story so much, I reread it again today! Yep, definitely a new fave.

[purpleygirl]

Oh, wow. ::huge grin:: Are you trying to give me an ego, or what? ;) But seriously, thank you for telling me! It's so cool you like it that much. :D