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[X] 100 Fubaru Themes (011)

Dec 12, 2005 02:21

This took me way longer to write than it should have. I went through two albums writing this (Howl, Thirteen Tales From Urban Bohemia), that's how long it took. It was a trouble maker for me, haha! shoot me now plzkthxbai

Love it or, well, not love it, I guess.

X/1999 // Fuuma/Subaru

100 Fubaru Themes:
011: Trouble maker

( A segment in which the only spoken word is never spoken )

x, 100_themes

Comments 4

starswan December 13 2005, 00:29:57 UTC

I was compelled to read this over and over again.
I couldn't help but notice certain ...interesting things.

I especially like how it began, with Subaru ripping the sugar packet in two and how they simultaneously paid at the end. The ripping in two but also the way in which Subaru goes about his business at the table...Made me imagine him tearing himself in two...and of them both "paying" at the end of their uncomfortably silent lunch for not having the nerve to initiate contact. :(
It made me sad actually. Fanfiction doesn't generally do that...

Inside Subaru was a mass of nervous tension, but Fuuma, who expressed perceived agitation externally and often with exaggeration, never knew it.Perhaps Fuuma knows more than Subaru thinks ( ... )

puppe December 13 2005, 02:49:23 UTC

Thank you very much for this comment! And yeah, I think that Fuuma...does not necessarily notice everything all the time because really, who can? Things slip by, especially when its in relation to oneself and other crap like that. I didn't really try to plan it all, just...paint an atmosphere. I had a visual in my head, and nothing really seemed to be going on, very stagnant. But it's something everyone can relate to, right? Misinterpreting timing and not saying something that perhaps you want to and maybe should say? I don't know. But I appreciate your remarks either way!

Your last paragraph rocked, by the way. Just...so you know.

And, yes........it would be theme 011........................(I'm totally on a roll as far as this editing thing goes)

starswan December 13 2005, 06:02:19 UTC

You're welcome ^_____^ .I really liked it.
And yeah, I think that Fuuma...does not necessarily notice everything all the time because really, who can?
I can!

Your last paragraph rocked, by the way. Just...so you know.
#^_^#

Thank you.

I look forward to more happy Fubaru!
Write on! (or something else horribly punny...)

starswan December 13 2005, 01:00:10 UTC

And while I am busy noticing things insert irony here because er I am weird and felt like it, would this one be theme 011?