Comments | prsw22: Change, by Anita, Jack/Sky

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Change, by Anita, Jack/Sky

Oct 22, 2006 17:31

Title: Change
Author: Anita
Relationship: Jack/Sky
Rating: PG
A/N: In which I manage to turn 'laughter' into something depressing.

( Laughter. It seemed all he could hear. )

sky/jack, anita, laughter

Comments 9

kikos_ai October 22 2006, 18:00:35 UTC

;_; That was beautiful. Really, one of the most sensitive 'Sky's dad' fics ever. The details are what get to me; the robotic nature of the gravesite tradition, the mom's unresponsiveness, Jack's clueness bumbling...this really hit a chord with me. Just wonderful and I can't gush enough.

Plus your twist on the laughter prompt is fantastic. I love seeing what writers can do with the list. :) Bravo!

anitabuchan October 24 2006, 20:16:44 UTC

Thank you! Wow, I'm so glad you feel like that. I was a bit nervous about this, but I'm now feling all glowy inside :).

I don't know how my mind turned 'laughter' into visiting a graveyard. I'm not sure I want to either.

scifislasher October 22 2006, 19:17:27 UTC

I like this, sweet and depressing by turns, but always good. Not quite sure how to express this without sounding like I'm babbling or anything, so I'll shut up now. :)

anitabuchan October 24 2006, 20:17:36 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad there were some sweet moments; I didn't want it to be too angsty.

mzdany October 24 2006, 04:04:46 UTC

Very nice and poignant! The dialogue was just awkward enough to convey the unhappy occasion. And Jack trying to cheer Sky up at the end was very sweet.
Good job!!

anitabuchan October 24 2006, 20:18:24 UTC

Thank you! I'm very glad you liked the dialogue. It can be so difficult :).

cmar_wingnut October 26 2006, 01:18:09 UTC

This was really so well done - a nice reversal on the laughter theme, and a very nice interplay between the characters of Sky (depressed and isolated) and Jack (trying his hardest to understand and help). Also a very interesting take on Sky's mother, who seems taken aback at meeting a Red Ranger, yet anxious to get to know her son's friend and lover.

I like that throughout this, Sky's father is never specifically mentioned, yet his presence is there. And the comment that Sky and his mom never see each other on 'nice' occasions, hinting at some deep trouble or perhaps just a distance between them.

Before I ramble on any more - great work!

welleg_fic August 7 2007, 17:55:16 UTC

Very sweet.

anitabuchan August 7 2007, 23:19:07 UTC

Thank you! And for all your other comments, they are lovely to get :).