Lurkers strike back

[satoda]

I posted it to my journal and got zero comments XD So here you go. I will not wait any longer xD

VEJI! GIVE ME TECHNO!

Title: Issues
Rating: M / R / NC-17, whatever - vocabulary is gonna be baaaaad. And there is SEX D: OH I ARE SO TERRIBLE!!! D: PEOPLE HIDE YER CHILDRENS!! DDD:
Setting: somewhere around G1
Starring: Jazz, Prowl, Ratchet, Opti Prime,

Comments

[morcian]

I'm commenting! Woohooo!
You know I love this story. And I'm not a commenting person, duh.
Now give me a random cookie, Dad ^.^ *hides back in teh shadow*

[morcian]

BTW - first comment MUAHAHAHAHAH

[satoda]

*wonders* random cookie, you say..

*goes cookin a fucking bright new cging for "Skarb"*

[morcian]

YAAAAAAAAY~!
It reminds me.... I should color SW's eyebrow. But I'm damn LAZY..... Uh, I mean, my tablet doesn't want to co-operate ^^" whatever.

*runs in circles*
I'm bored D:

[vejiraziel]

VEJI! GIVE ME TECHNO!

Fine! >.>;; working on it!

[satoda]

Good.

[mommimus_prime]

To be honest, I think you need a really good beta read on this. I like the story, but the odd sentence structure makes it hard to follow.

[satoda]

I'm not native english xD
And now find me a beta reader XD

Anyways - I'm too chaotic to notice the strange sentence structure. Thanks! I will work on it.

[mommimus_prime]

I figured you weren't English as a first language but didn't want to say anything in case you were. I certainly wouldn't try writing in a different language. My hat's off to you for doing it.

[satoda]

I don't get the tenses right, I suppose o.O cause there are only 6 in Polish. And hell, 21 in English! WTF. But I hope I manage.

Anything more you noticed that needs improving?

[__wilderness__]

Awwwwwww....

*service announcement*
Coherent comment will follow when poster has stopped being puddle of mush
*service announcement*

[satoda]

uuuuuuum... *pokes the mush from 2 meters away with a long stick* Are you ok yet?

*starts giggling* yay, mush! *poke poke*