I really liked this, it was lovely. A very enjoyable read. I loved both Kevin and Jesse.
My only 'but' is that it seems a bit rushed. You might wanna give us some escenes with a bit more interaction in them, leading up to the Non-Date Date Scene and a bit more afterwards, ending in Kevin's Freak Out And Jesse's Confession Scene.
Oh, a real critique. So exciting. I haven't posted original fic in awhile. I forgot how cool people are about that, actually giving real criticisms. I'm glad you liked it, and I totally understand what you say when it feels rushed, because it kind of was. I really don't think I gave the story justice in that regard, but I was ready to be done with it. I just wasn't having that much fun with the characters. C'est la vie. Thanks for reading and commenting!
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My only 'but' is that it seems a bit rushed. You might wanna give us some escenes with a bit more interaction in them, leading up to the Non-Date Date Scene and a bit more afterwards, ending in Kevin's Freak Out And Jesse's Confession Scene.
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