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The man she loved 1/1

Nov 06, 2006 16:17

Title: The Man She Loved
Author: Pamala
Characters: Alex and Pam Mahone
Category: Post ep " Unearthed "
Summary: Mahone grabs hold of a precious memory to help calm
him after Michael's phone call
Rating: G
Disclaimer: I know they're not mine. I'm old and tired so, PTB,
please don't slap me around for playing with your toys.
Thanks: To jenalexis for the ( Read more... )

challenges, pam mahone, g, pamala, alex mahone

Comments 17

sierra_foxx November 6 2006, 23:52:27 UTC

Hmmmmm! I like how you have drawn the picture of Alex as he was a younger man, one who was very intelligent and confident within himself around women, until he met Pam. Then all the insecurities about himself come to the fore... it makes him a little more human!

And I like your description of Pam - she is a smart sassy woman, but one who has been utterly devastated by her husband's 180 degree change in character, I can understand why she would come off a bit cold towards him. The hurt is still pretty close to the surface, methinks.

Nice job, Pam - I look forward to seeing where you take these guys - I think they are both damaged by what transpired between them, which makes me think that it used to be something pretty good. *g*

pamalax November 7 2006, 22:20:19 UTC

Then all the insecurities about himself come to the fore... it makes him a little more human!

I really think this is a lot of what they have begun to show us about the man. There was so clearly love there on both sides between him and the ex. We are getting more and more scraps of regret and hopelessness from him as to his past, role, and failures as the story unfolds, so I can't help but see there was once a decent man there.

I do think that man is lost for good and the most he has to offer along the line is perhaps possibly saving Michael, by example, from an equally bleak future as his destruction unfolds.

Its all very bittersweet.

And I like your description of Pam - she is a smart sassy woman
Her description of him throwing out shoes if they got scuffed prompted all that. You could tell it was not her way but was still oddly endearing to her like any opposites attract kind of deal can be.

I think they are both damaged by what transpired between them, which makes me think that it used to be something pretty good. *g*I see ( ... )

stealmy_kiss November 8 2006, 00:23:47 UTC

Nice job on this; you're planning to continue? What they've set up so far between these two characters is really interesting and you've definitely tapped into that. He obviously still loves her and the way he answered Michael's call made it seem like he was still in contact with her pretty regularly (the "I don't have time for this now, Pam"). I like the idea that he would call her and warn her about Michael--seems just like what he'd do.

pamalax November 8 2006, 01:04:55 UTC

Nice job on this; you're planning to continue?

Doubt I could help myself if I tried *g* Once a character grabs my attention, Alex Mahone has a hold on me, I'm at their mercy until they done with me.

What they've set up so far between these two characters is really interesting and you've definitely tapped into that.
Thank you :o) Its always nice to know you did a decent job but I especially enjoy it when a character has managed to capture my heart and imagination.

He obviously still loves her and the way he answered Michael's call made it seem like he was still in contact with her pretty regularly (the "I don't have time for this now, Pam").
I think there is love there both way. She had his number handy on the cell and he was not at all surprised to hear her voice.

I'm sure there love there and bet my bottom dollar he pushed them away to protect them which is really sad!!

I like the idea that he would call her and warn her about Michael--seems just like what he'd do.hmmmmmm? Never occured to me that he wouldnt or hadn't? I ( ... )

stealmy_kiss November 8 2006, 01:28:43 UTC

hmmmmmm? Never occured to me that he wouldnt or hadn't? I completely assumed he did but that makes me wonder if perhaps he didnt and she will end up in danger from forces other than Michael because he failed to warn. Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

Oh I bet he did, I just didn't assume since we didn't see it. He better have called her sometime in between the freaking out and the grave digging. Did you watch the amex promo? If you haven't and you don't mind being a little spoiled, you should definitely watch it.

pamalax November 8 2006, 01:47:14 UTC

Awwwwwwwwwww man you're killing me LOL. I really have no problem with being spoiled BUT since I make a whole lot prediction for the future in my monster size week reviews and character analysis post I have sworn them off so people can't say " You knew that because you read the spoilers! " when I'm
right about stuff.

I so want to know :o( MUST BE STRONG!!

Thread 5

bluedelft November 9 2006, 02:16:32 UTC

Saw this posted the other day and finally had the chance to sit and read and so glad I did :-)

A different side of Mahone and I'm liking it! More did I see there was going to be more, I'm liking that also.

Not taking the pills when it looked liked that's what he needed - ohhh, little twist there.

It's interesting to see how the stories in this challenge are going in different directions but all being about the same thing. We're getting a chance to see what others are thinking about the backstory of the characters and it's another added bonus to the stories I guess you could say.

pamalax November 9 2006, 15:37:25 UTC

A different side of Mahone and I'm liking it! More did I see there was going to be more, I'm liking that also.

Not sure I stop writing Mahone if I tried :o)

Not taking the pills when it looked liked that's what he needed - ohhh, little twist there.
That is one of favorite parts!! Men IMO often have the oddest ways of demonstrating love so I liked the idea that while he could accept that weakness in himself most of the time when it came to her, someone very important to him, he wanted to real for her.

We're getting a chance to see what others are thinking about the backstory of the characters and it's another added bonus to the stories I guess you could say.
This challenge really is going GREAT!! I just got done reading Sucre's first kiss and it was fantastic 100% Fernando stuff that was
a real gem. I may have to take another character myself before month end.

bluedelft November 10 2006, 00:42:31 UTC

After writing the Bellick one I might try a drabble for another character.

Yeah, more Mahone fic *happy dance*

scarletmuse November 10 2006, 20:08:19 UTC

I repled to this on PBfic already, but i thought it was fair i'd post here, too.

Lovely story!! Sometimes I stop and wonder how much fanfic adds to a show like PB, where there's so much left unsaid and so many blanks to fill. Like here, you can imagine a whole world for a 'minor' character, and if the writer is talented enough (and you are!) the characters will retain their quirks and personailities from the show, without being changed to something different.

The effect is impressive, because the stories blend so well with the show that they just complete it, and so, make its characters more real and enjoyable.

Considering I've always felt fascinated by Alex, although he frustrates me to death, i was longing to see the sweet side of the cold guy... like all women who dig bad boys do, anyway. And this little moment was so sweet, and then, wham, you take it back and he's back to the usual Alex, but there's this warm and fuzzy feeling lingering...

In a few words, I loved it!

pamalax November 10 2006, 20:29:03 UTC

I repled to this on PBfic already, but i thought it was fair i'd post here, too.

Thanks for doing that. I really havent been over there much since the chaos about control of the archive if not closing began so I really aoppreciate you taking the time to do it here.

I love the way that site is but I have to admit I like this better because it really allow the writers and reader to talk more freely.

Lovely story!! Sometimes I stop and wonder how much fanfic adds to a show like PB, where there's so much left unsaid and so many blanks to fill. Like here, you can imagine a whole world for a 'minor' character, and if the writer is talented enough (and you are!) the characters will retain their quirks and personailities from the show, without being changed to something different.I so agree that fan fic can add to the show by filling in the blanks that the writers just dont have the time to play with. And yes filling in those blanks while doing justice to the work the real writers are doing/ have done is the goal for any writers so I ( ... )

scarletmuse November 10 2006, 20:54:25 UTC

I love the way that site is but I have to admit I like this better because it really allow the writers and reader to talk more freely.
So true! Many times I'd like to reply to what other authors say and I can't... I reckon this makes the site more tidy, but still. :(

I could go on discussing the personality of characters forever and ever... it' easy to write fanfic because you don't ahve to fret over bouilding the personailty of a character from scratch, and also, it's a challenge. Oh, after reading this, I'm thinking about writing some 'Alex' myself, and I never thought twas possible. So... thanks!

Okay, I'll shut my mouth now. :)

pamalax November 10 2006, 21:00:36 UTC

Oh, after reading this, I'm thinking about writing some 'Alex' myself, and I never thought twas possible. So... thanks!

YAY! * claps with joy *
He really is a deliciously complex tortured character and they fact that we know so little at this point playing with him is irresitable fun.

I'll be looking very forward to it :)

dirtandweeds November 11 2006, 07:42:12 UTC

Hi Pam, just wanted to let you know you've done an awesome job here. I'm actually starting to like your version of Mahone a lot better than the real one they've presented us with.

She wore baggy sweatshirts, walked on her too long pants until the bottoms frayed, and never gave a second thought to how it looked as she'd ball her hair, when it dared to get in her eyes, up on her head trapping it haphazardly in place with her well chewed pencil. == Wow, I am so in love with this new character. Seriously, she's awww-inspiring.

And finally, just an easy question, will you still be writing MAH/MICH fic in future?

pamalax November 11 2006, 13:38:57 UTC

Hi Pam, just wanted to let you know you've done an awesome job here. I'm actually starting to like your version of Mahone a lot better than the real one they've presented us with.

WOW thanks!! I'm really liking the character more and more, after all he's like a far gone dark Michael, so its really nice to hear I can help you enjoy my man Mahone a lil more. THANKS!!

Wow, I am so in love with this new character. Seriously, she's awww-inspiring.
heheheheeeeeeee!! While I did have her lil jab about his throwing out his shoes if they got scuffed the rest is a lil bit of a Mary Sue. That would have been me in college years :o)

And finally, just an easy question, will you still be writing MAH/MICH fic in future? YES! As a matter of fact I hope to get one post rendezvous done this weekend. I've been kind of mulling it all over for a bit because I want it all to stay in the same series which leaves me with the shared past stuff to blend with what we know about their lives and relationships outside one another. I wanted it all to be ( ... )