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Shadows (part 5/?)

Jul 22, 2006 13:29

Title: Shadows (Part 5)
Author: angel_1013
Rating: R for language & violence
Characters: Michael POV with others thrown in for flavor.
Summary: This is the third and last installment of my Regret/Pieces series. You should probably read Regret and Pieces first as this won’t make much sense otherwise. Shadows takes us back to Michael’s POV and runs parallel ( Read more... )

michael, angel_1013, r

Comments 7

sierra_foxx July 23 2006, 03:39:50 UTC

Great job Angel! Finally Michael is about to be released - liked how you described his last walk in the yard...and T-Bag's reaction - haha!

Can't wait to read Michael's POV on his meeting with Sara!

pureskies July 23 2006, 05:32:01 UTC

that was so great!!

My fave bit:

"I sink down onto my bed, lay the letter carefully aside, and shamelessly let the flood of tears escape. It’s all so overwhelming and as I bury my face in my hands I feel Veronica sit down next to me and wrap her arms around my shaking shoulders."

*sigh*
that is so sad and sweet! aww. getting a little teary! lol.

What a great chapter - i cant wait for the next one! Sara yay!

accrues July 23 2006, 14:32:35 UTC

Now I just feel like collapsing in tears because well, you're just such a great writer.
Feedback time!

I spent a few months drugged and locked up in the Whack Shack.
Interesting. I assumed he would for a while, but I never really thought about it. He would go nuts. He just would. Too big a brain ;)

“Well, hello, Veronica. It’s great to see you, too.”

Glancing up at me, distracted, she gives me her evil eye as she leafs through some papers. “I’m glad to see you’re feeling better,” she says sarcastically.
Cracks me up. I actually like Veronica. There are so many people out there that flatly don't like her, because she's a little... slow sometimetimes, but she's not stupid. You write her so well, and it shows that she is a person, not just a character fill in.

“I know you robbed that bank so you would end up in this prison. Hell, you didn’t even intend to rob the bank. You just wanted to get caught. You’ve had it all planned from the beginning. The tattoos, the bank, your trial, this prison.” Shaking his head he says, “I think you ( ... )

miss_mazzie July 26 2006, 12:09:29 UTC

I actually like Veronica. There are so many people out there that flatly don't like her, == Hey, I like her, too. I thought this fandom was exceptionally hard on her. But, you may indeed be her last friend, 'cause even I jumped ship after she called the then dead Nick after finding Steadman in Wyoming. This woman has had her apartment blown up, she's been kidnapped, she's witnessed murders, and now she calls Nick?!?!? *headdesk* This is wrong on so many levels!!!

accrues July 27 2006, 13:22:44 UTC

This woman has had her apartment blown up, she's been kidnapped, she's witnessed murders, and now she calls Nick?!?!
Oh so true. But then again, we all do things spur of the moment.. Meh, yeah I'll agree. She is a bit dim sometimes ;)

snowwhite22 July 24 2006, 19:50:35 UTC

Oh, I'm loving this. I love repentent Michael. He's got so much he's sorry for and you've captured him so well.

I can't WAIT for this next part. Bring it ASAP.

This feedback is really sad, as I'm writing this. Sorry, babe. I'm going to do better next time.

miss_mazzie July 26 2006, 12:12:04 UTC

I sink down onto my bed, lay the letter carefully aside, and shamelessly let the flood of tears escape. It’s all so overwhelming and as I bury my face in my hands I feel Veronica sit down next to me and wrap her arms around my shaking shoulders. == Quite an image. I know I've said it before, but there is an acceptance of this all around Michael, but it is dark. And it totally belies the ice-cream ending. I think Michael must be the most well-adjusted person on the planet to go through all of this and just so easily forgive Sara. I can't wait to hear Michael's side of that part of the story.