Comments | princess2000204: Suicide, Maybe? 15/15

princess2000204

Suicide, Maybe? 15/15

Dec 31, 2011 00:47

I feel my body being shaken, blinking open my eyes, I glare up at Tom’s face above me. He has a worried look on his face which doesn’t seem right by the soreness that I feel in my body. Stretching my body, I certainly feel the twinges in my legs and arms as I’m sure Tom is feeling it in other parts.

“Wha?” I mutter as I bury my head back into my ( Read more... )

bill/tom, th, writing, suicide, fanfic

Comments 3

kseenaa January 1 2012, 17:11:24 UTC

You still kept a mystery.... We still know nothing about Bill. Just that he has had it though and has lived with Georg and his family. But we don't know for how long. And he must have had a seriously shitty life before that to be so closed off and cutting himself. But we know nothing about that ( ... )

princess2000204 January 1 2012, 17:43:33 UTC

I did leave some unanswered questions as well as leave plenty open-ended ends as I do plan on writing a sequel which will go more in-depth with Bill and Tom's budding relationship.

I'm very happy to see that Tom is as loveable as I was trying to create him to be. Bill will always being cynical and snarky, just less so with Tom.

This story will continue in first person perspective as sadly enough, that's really all I can write in. I am glad that you were able to enjoy this story despite that short-coming.

This story will go through an over-haul as I go back, see what I did leave open-ended and correcting some of the truly horrendous grammar I've seen. But rest assured, a sequel will be forthcoming in the near future.

kseenaa January 2 2012, 00:20:35 UTC

WOHOO! A sequel! :-D Then I'll get to see them boys some more. :-) Colour me happy! *grin*

Well, maybe Tom was just the right remidy for Bill? Certinaly looked like it, didn't it? ;-)

I think it is OK withy first person as long as it is done well. Now, that is quite rare though. But you do. :-) You make it work and you write it well. :-)