Reprieve

[prairiedawntoo]

Title:  Reprieve
Rating:  G
Characters:  Ten, Alex Caron (mine), Marie Caron (mine)
Summary:  Character introduction piece.   Sometimes companions choose themselves.  Especially when they have assertive mothers.
Disclaimer:  Obviously Doctor Who isn't mine.  Thanks BBC
Spoilers:  None intentional...set between Voyage of the Damned and Partners in Crime

Comments

[the_curlyone]

Oh, this is a lovely fic. Really good considering its your first one. Your original characters were strongly drawn and had depth and personality because of it. One slight britpick, I don't think the Doctor would use the word "kid" even if he was in America. Also i suppose it could be argued that you should use garden in place of yard since it's from the Doctor's pov. But that doesn't really matter so much.

Anyway, enough rambling, hope to see more from you soon!

Britpicks

[prairiedawntoo]

Fixed garden as soon as I found it. Omitted kid (the one time I know I used it). If there's one line that absolutely must not go thud, that would be it. Just left out the whole phrase, since I couldn't endure the clunkiness. The rhythm of that bit of dialogue sounds less than perfect now, though. I'll fix it later.

Arrrgh, perfectionism, thy name is Prairie.

[starmalachite]

This is really marvelous. The highest praise I can give is that I normally strongly dislike OC kids, but Alex is delightful & feels very real. Please continue her story.

[prairiedawntoo]

Thanks,

Lately it seems that the only way to avoid romantic entanglements is to write kids. The key to which, it seems to me, is to write them as people who happen to be younger, not as cute little monsters.

Thanks for being bored or curious enough to check it out in spite of the warning "irritatingly clever children".

[tempusdominus10]

I think he DId use the word kid once; but Im not good at remembering things sometimes, so... wow this was GREAT! KEEP ON GOING!!! so wonderful! There's nothing I love more than him caring for children.

[prairiedawntoo]

There's a second entry. Called Ember.

[tempusdominus10]

And... is that a real condition? COz... that sounds like me a little bit.

Disintegrative synesthesia

[prairiedawntoo]

Not real. Synesthesias are real, and there are disintegrative disorders of childhood, but this particular suite of symptoms is completely fictional, and the result of a ridiculous amount of research.

On the other hand, Alex's ADHD is pretty much standard issue.

[lindenharp]

I like your Alex. She's interesting and unusual, but doesn't rise to Mary Sue levels of perfection. I read and enjoyed your second fic, Ember, then realized that I hadn't yet commented on this introductory piece.

May I friend you? I don't want to risk missing the future tales that I hope you'll be producing.

[prairiedawntoo]

Sure, you may. But I'm not sure how I reciprocate. Hopefully it will be self explanatory.

Tamara

Yeah, it doesn't hurt that she's clumsy and obnoxious.

[lindenharp]

If you want to reciprocate, just click on the link for my username. That will bring you to my LJ page. At the top, you'll find a link that says "add them as a friend".

There is no obligation to friend someone back. This is especially true for fiction journals. If you friend me, then you'll see my postings on your f-list, as well as seeing them on some of the fanfic communities you watch. But it may well be that my fiction isn't to your taste. Much of what I write is relationship-based (specifically Nine/Rose/Jack OT3), though I also write gen stories. I have friended various writers who did not reciprocate, presumably because my fics aren't their cup of tea. And vice versa. And that's Just Fine.

For people whose journals are personal/social, the implications of "friending" or "unfriending" become more subtle and complicated. I don't have any experience with that side of things, and can't comment on it.

[prairiedawntoo]

What does OT3 mean? Still collecting abbreviations.

Have you ever seen Nigel Marven in Chased by Sea Monsters?

I feel a crossover attacking me...