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PSX: Everything Went Dark

Mar 11, 2006 19:11

Title:: Everything Went Dark
Author: liadlaith
Prompt: 1. Set in either the past or the future, not the present (before 1990 or after 2010); 2. Include a pocket knife and a black bird; 3. Begin with "And the lights went out."
Wordcount: 2,270

( And the lights went out. )

liadlaith, psx

Comments 5

puddlesofun March 12 2006, 04:32:32 UTC

Hey, it's that guy again! Or is it? Why is he androgynous this time? And why doesn't he shake his fist at the Shakespeare shelf? Well, okay, I know the answer to the last one is "because that would be silly".

I like this story. I like the way you Marlowe's voice. I like the way he glosses over the mechanics of the thing, because he says it's not important to the story, and he's right.

I have trouble saying much about it, though, because it is so clearly part of something bigger. It would be like trying to judge a painting by a close-up reproduction of some particular detail. Marlowes story is complete and satisfying, of course, just like he said it would be. But we are still left with the mystery of this Rex fellow, because we've seen only a bit of the middle of his. And I want to know more! I assume this is your intention, because it's a pretty good hook for a serial or chapter or whatever you'd call it.

puddlesofun March 12 2006, 04:44:40 UTC

Just ignore the missing apostrophe in that comment.

liadlaith March 14 2006, 11:43:03 UTC

It's that guy again, but he ain't androgynous. Read it again : )

The reaction to Shakespeare is something I see as coming later.

Yeah, it is really part of something larger, which is kind of a cop out. I'm not actually that happy with it, because I wrote it to try and grasp Marlowe's voice, but I don't think I succeeded.

Also: puddlesofun March 12 2006, 04:33:10 UTC

Unheimlich?

Re: Also: liadlaith March 14 2006, 11:40:24 UTC

Unhomelike. Uncanny.