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PSX: I Am Half-Sick of Shadows

Mar 11, 2006 18:37

Title: I Am Half-Sick of Shadows
Author: puddlesofun
Prompt: 1. A maze; 2. A dictionary; 3. Water; 4. A knight.
Wordcount: 4,830

( Every morning, I solve the labyrinth. )

psx, puddlesofun

Comments 2

liadlaith March 11 2006, 13:08:04 UTC

I like it! Unfortunately (fortunately?) I read the twist while I was posting the story, so I knew what was going on, but it was fun to see all the clues. I'm curious as to why you chose to write Nick's speech without quotes (except for that bit in the middle).

puddlesofun March 12 2006, 04:45:52 UTC

I don't so much.

Last question first: the bit in the middle is a mistake.

More generally:

At first I wanted to create more of a dream-like atmosphere, and make the words that everyone speak seem more like part of Nick's thoughts and perceptions, so I tried removing all the quotation marks. This was too confusing (I've since figured that such a trick is a lot easier if you're in third person, because every sentenc ethat starts with "I" or "you" automatically registers as speech, but I digress...), so I put them all back except for Nick's, and some of Laura's in the memory of how they first met.

Which, now I think of it, means those quotation marks in the last line aren't meant to be there. How embarrassing. I swear I proofread it a bunch of times...