Short Fiction Excerpt

[poetgirl925]

A/N: Excerpt from a short fiction novel I’m publishing in a few months. No title yet - I’m looking for feedback from anyone interested enough to read and let me know if you think the characters are compelling, and if the story sounds like something you’d like to read, etc. It falls into the romance category with some drama and comedy sprinkled

Comments

[sarahol1]

I would definitely like to read more...there's a few areas where your syntax could be clearer and there's a bit of an "Internet-writing" feel to it, but this kind of fiction is right up my alley. I'd be happy to read anything else you've got!

[serafina19]

So I'm incredibly behind on your fics but I did have time to read this on the bus yesterday and I forgot to mention this in the email I just sent, but yes.

Yes I would read it. Anna's voice is strong here and there's enough of Ethan to pique curiosity. Also, props on the summary. I suck at those.

Now, avoidance tactics is something I can strongly relate to but I think you may have laid it on a little thick. The reason I say 'may' is probably due to the length of the excerpt and the fact I really don't read much, so don't read too much into it.

In the end, I just wanted to let you know that I liked it a lot and I wish you luck publishing it.

[madlenita]

Thanks for posting this, couple years ago i promised myself that if one of my favorite fanfic writer published something i will buy this, i guess now i had to find a way to do this ;-)

Thoughts

[ica013]

Hello!

honestly thought when I sent the ask to your tumblr account (as fellow Chlollie fan) that I had already left my thoughts on this snippet.

There were a couple of lines that I really liked - and I really liked the description of someone seeing Harry Potter 93 times in a season.(That kind of need to block out everything really spoke to me).

Lots of potential and would love to read the second draft when you get to it.