Thank you! I really liked your comment since I try to develop the stories as much as possible, making sure I think of everything and look at it from every angle :)
At first, I couldn't figure out exactly how Daphne could sense Delia so clearly, but the story explained that in due time. That puts these lines in a different perspective:
"I don’t know, but I can’t keep living like this,” I said. “And I won’t let Delia live that way either.”
The pain isn't abstract, and moreover, she has to know just how awful it is for her sister to keep going through it.
The sound of my sister’s screams filled my ears for a moment before silence and darkness fell over us both. I understand Daphne's solution completely. I coudn't have said whether her choice would also kill Delia, apart from that you seemed to chose that, but it would certainly have made her sister completely uninteresting to Van Dorn after that point. Either way, it was either potential freedom from being an experiment, or freedom from the torture.
I love how you touch on the concept of "twin closeness" here -- from what I understand, many twins have a sympathetic closeness in that if they're apart and one gets hurt, say, the other will automatically sense/feel it in some way. It makes perfect sense that Daphne and Delia would also have that.
I honestly don't know what would be worse: slitting your own throat or being an experiment again. You make the dilemma very disturbing to the reader, which isn't an easy thing to do ;)
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This would be a great series!
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It was a last minute idea I had to fight with, I'm glad it worked out in the end! I'm pretty pleased with how it came out :)
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At first, I couldn't figure out exactly how Daphne could sense Delia so clearly, but the story explained that in due time. That puts these lines in a different perspective:
"I don’t know, but I can’t keep living like this,” I said. “And I won’t let Delia live that way either.”
The pain isn't abstract, and moreover, she has to know just how awful it is for her sister to keep going through it.
The sound of my sister’s screams filled my ears for a moment before silence and darkness fell over us both.
I understand Daphne's solution completely. I coudn't have said whether her choice would also kill Delia, apart from that you seemed to chose that, but it would certainly have made her sister completely uninteresting to Van Dorn after that point. Either way, it was either potential freedom from being an experiment, or freedom from the torture.
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I hadn't thought of your potential ending, but I like it too. Thank you for reading!
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I honestly don't know what would be worse: slitting your own throat or being an experiment again. You make the dilemma very disturbing to the reader, which isn't an easy thing to do ;)
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