Down in the Playground (Gen, PG)

[pixel_0]

Title: Down in the Playground
Rating: Light PG
Category: Gen oneshot
Word Count: 1106
Characters: Dean-centric, with Sam, John, and OCs
Spoilers: None
Author’s Notes: Written for prompt 6: Inferiority Complex for the 

Comments

[kronette]

Okay, that's two stories I've read in a week that have made me just break down and cry. This was simply astounding, heartbreaking, achingly Dean.

I think we call carry a bit of a lonely child inside (or else it's just me), so that resonates with a lot of people. This? Just...I have no words.

[pixel_0]

I'm so sorry for making you cry, I really am. *passes Kleenex*

I think we call carry a bit of a lonely child inside (or else it's just me), so that resonates with a lot of people.

Well, I know it rang true for me in a lot of areas. Maybe not the same way Dean did, but being teased by your peers in elementary school or not meeting your parents' expectations. Just things like those that I can personally remember--and actually thought about, to be honest when writing this. It's really painful in those ways to realize that we all have that bit of hurt child inside.

Thank you so much for such kind feedback. I truly appreciate it. :)

[iamstealthyone]

Aww, nice ficlet here. Very melancholy, but with some real sweetness at the end.

Favorite lines:

Scoffs at his shabby clothing, and the way his hair is cut a little bit too crooked and hangs sloppily over his watery eyes.

Great description there, as it gives us visual proof of the messed up childhood Dean and Sam had. Not enough money (or care on John's part) to get them good clothes and decent haircuts. *hugs both boys*

He thinks of the world and how it never helped him, and he thinks of all that pushed him down and ate him up.

Love that sentence, especially the end of it, about "all that pushed him down and ate him up." Stark and beautiful.

So, even though no one ever helped him, ever cared enough to see him through the dark, Dean extends his hand, and he helps Sam to his feet.

As he always has. As he always will.

Such a good big brother. *pets Dean*

Thanks for a lovely read.

[pixel_0]

Great description there, as it gives us visual proof of the messed up childhood Dean and Sam had. Not enough money (or care on John's part) to get them good clothes and decent haircuts. *hugs both boys*

For some reason, I have this image of them being the children that nobody really wanted to play with or be friends with because they didn't have the best clothing or the newest toys. John--as far as we know--didn't work the most well-paying jobs, and being a single parent had to be difficult. As much as I don't want to point the "bad father" finger at John, I think he probably did sometimes care more about the hunts than the appearance of the boys.

Thank you so much for such wonderful feedback. I always enjoy getting comments from you because you say exactly what you like, which is a pleasure to know. So, thank you again. :)

[iamstealthyone]

For some reason, I have this image of them being the children that nobody really wanted to play with or be friends with because they didn't have the best clothing or the newest toys.

Yeah, I think that's probably accurate. And they were probably on out outside looking in not only because of their physical appearance, but their personalities, too. Knowing the things they knew had to affect how they interacted with people.

I always enjoy getting comments from you because you say exactly what you like, which is a pleasure to know. So, thank you again. :)

You're welcome. My pleasure. :)

[pixel_0]

And they were probably on out outside looking in not only because of their physical appearance, but their personalities, too. Knowing the things they knew had to affect how they interacted with people.

Oh, most likely indeed. It couldn't have been easy to go to school and pretend to be normal, while they have to move from city to city with their dad after a demon that killed their mother. Although, I've always wondered why Sam went after normalcy instead of Dean. It seems to me that Dean, who had experienced a brief period of normalcy, would have went after it more than Sam did. But, now I'm rambling... :P

[why_me_why_not]

This is just so heartwrenchingly perfect! *loves*

[pixel_0]

Aw, thank you very much. I'm so glad you liked it. :D

Haven't seen you around much, but it looks like from your journal that life's been pretty busy. Everything going well?

[why_me_why_not]

Life is completely crazy, I swear, and the heat is making it worse. And I'm failing fandom so bad it makes me more depressed to even try to get caught up, y'know? But things are going pretty okay, I guess. How about you?

[pixel_0]

Ugh. The heat. No AC here, so it's all fans and loads of ice water. I miss winter already.

You're not only in the fandom thing, either. I feel all "blah" about everything involving fandom lately, so I've been focing these psych_30 fics down my throat just so nobody can point a finger and go, "Pixel's not writing" and then try to take them away from me.

I've talked to a few other people who feel the same way. I'm not sure if it's just the "summer blah" without any new episodes or what. :P I sort of miss my squeeing with happiness days.

[mellaithwen]

owie :( *sniff*

he caught Sam!

*kicks shit out john*

[pixel_0]

Of course he caught Sam! Because he's a good big brother. :D

Now, now, don't hurt John. *pulls him away* I still need him for my stories. *tsk, tsk*

[mellaithwen]

oh yes he is *smushes him*

*runs after you* he was a right dickhead and you know it

[pixel_0]

Oh, I'm so sorry. *offers glue for heart* Now we just need some happy fic for Dean to make it all better, yes? Yes. :)

Thank you very much for the feedback.