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One-shot: The pot flower that saw it all

Nov 16, 2011 00:22

Title: The pot flower that saw it all
Pairings/Characters: Ryo/Shige
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Fern used as more than a plot device
Summary: This is a story of moments through which two people evolved.
Notes: This is better taken with a grain of salt. I sincerely hope I stayed within the boundaries set out by the rules.
This was written for je_telephone ( Read more... )

r: pg-13, group: news, lenght: one-shot, p: ryo/shige

Comments 11

arashijun November 16 2011, 01:16:33 UTC

*rolls around* I love the feeling of this. Amazing, really.

sashjun November 19 2011, 20:45:23 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad it can be appreciated even outside the context of the telephone.

c_shayne November 16 2011, 03:59:31 UTC

i love this fic... a lot. :) <3

sashjun November 19 2011, 20:45:44 UTC

:DDDD I am happy you do. Thanks!

mirazuki_yuuri November 16 2011, 07:11:36 UTC

i like this!! A LOT!!!

sashjun November 19 2011, 20:45:57 UTC

Thanks a lot!

carmine_pink November 18 2011, 07:55:43 UTC

As I said in the original post, I really liked how everything's so uncertain with their relationship, but it somehow remained hopeful. Or at least the fern was feeling hopeful. XD Nicely done.

I felt the same way you did. The characters of the fic I had to remix were totally not my forte. XD

carmine_pink November 18 2011, 07:57:25 UTC

And this was my favorite part:

It all comes together the night Shige sits on the balcony, alone and huddled, facing the fern, not the world outside, and tells the story from the start. But now it is tainted with doubts and fears. Shige doesn’t know where they are heading, if there is logic behind the two of them, if it is right to cling to what they have. It’s not usual, it’s not safe, it’s not perfect, and it means giving up too much. Shige loves Ryo. He thinks, on most days, Ryo loves Shige too, but is that really enough? Will the next five years be as foolish as the first five? How much longer can they go on? How much can they do together? Is there still something that Shige is able to do alone? What is it that he wants and needs? Shige crumbles that night

<3

sashjun November 19 2011, 20:47:28 UTC

I know, the telephone really did challenge us, right ;D

Also thank you for commenting again and pulling out the quote. You made me happy twice (or three times actually)!

♥

jtriskell November 21 2011, 10:01:23 UTC

sashjun November 23 2011, 20:00:27 UTC

thanks for reading, glad you found it enjoyable!