Comments | pillow_verse: One-shot: Tangles of what is left behind (part 2)

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One-shot: Tangles of what is left behind (part 2)

Oct 23, 2011 15:49

Title: Tangles of what is left behind
Pairing: Jin, Yamapi and cameos of established Ryo,Ueda
Rating: NC 17
Warnings: future fic, features an OC - a child
Summary: After failing in the States, Jin decides not to continue his career in Japan. Instead, he turns his life upside down. Not everyone understands.
Notes: 22.508 words, written for ryogrande as a ( Read more... )

+request+, !cross-over, lenght: one-shot, r: nc-17, p: jin/yamapi, p: ryo/ueda

Comments 29

fluffy_beast21 October 23 2011, 16:14:41 UTC

awwwww....this is soo nice!
I'm actually speechless and I can't say anything that would be used except for Amazing!
this is a very very wonderful story!
keep up the good work!

and thank you for writing this story!

sashjun October 23 2011, 20:04:34 UTC

Ah thank you! I'm really happy this is actually well received.

fluffy_beast21 October 24 2011, 16:07:58 UTC

awww...it really is beautiful!
and uwaaaaaaa~ I was first? o.O

agustin1982 October 23 2011, 17:13:33 UTC

I LOVE ITTTTTTTTTTT ♥

PINPINPIN ♥

This Awesome ♥

sashjun October 23 2011, 20:05:42 UTC

Thanks! It's so nice to hear people like it enough to get through over 20k of fic :D

zheinpathos October 23 2011, 18:20:25 UTC

This was gorgeous! ♥

sashjun October 23 2011, 20:06:08 UTC

oh, hey you, how did you get here? Also thanks! ♥

zheinpathos October 23 2011, 20:46:05 UTC

I have my ways ;) ♥

wintersdancer October 23 2011, 18:55:09 UTC

I loved the dynamics between all the characters and I think I probably fell in love with Ayano, even if I don't like kiss.

I might have wanted to punch Pi at a certain point, but then everything developped in a way that was screaming "of course it would have been like that!".

I loved it, it was perfect.

sashjun October 23 2011, 20:07:38 UTC

Kids are hard to handle :D In writing and reading as well. But you made me incredible happy with the dynamics comment and the punching of Pi, he was kind of a jerk, wasn't he ;D

OMG, thanks!

tatoeba October 23 2011, 19:34:43 UTC

ALEX OMG I LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS FIC THAT I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHAT ELSE TO SAY. Ugh my heart, my HEART. I lovelovelove the whole premise of Jin and Ayano (!!! SO CUTE OMG. I love Jin with kids ♥ ;_;) and how he manages this JE hotel (LOL XD) in Hawaii, and then everything between Pi and Jin. You wrote their relationship in this - the falling out, the awkwardness, the tension, and then the gradual realization that maybe there's something more. It was really just perfect. The running away and stuff (although frustrating, lol) felt natural and I could really see it ( ... )

sashjun October 23 2011, 20:16:02 UTC

oh, I have no clue what to say *_______________________*

I seriously, it feels so good reading this comment because I was so worried I was drawing it out too much and that the pacing might have been too slow, but I didn't know how to make it flow faster, so idek. I'm glad people react to the moments like the first kiss or Pi coming for Ayano (and essentially for Jin). Also the scene with Ayano, I sat there for three days wondering if I should continue this, start anew, or just delete that scene only or what, so *____*

Also Yay for Ryo and Ueda working out as the back up in this. NGL I enjoyed writing their "simple" relationship so much.

So, ugh, just THANK YOU SO MUCH for reading my monster and leaving me such a nice comment.