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Miles Vorkosigan Fic: 'Lady Macbeth’s Soliloquy' (Galen family)

Jun 19, 2008 16:14

Title: 'Lady Macbeth’s Soliloquy'

Fandom: Miles Vorkosigan

Rating: PG - 13

Prompt: L is for Luddite

Characters: The Galen family.
Summary: There’s blood on her hands and nothing will ever wash it away. Or the thoughts of Duv Galeni’s mother during the Komarran Revolt.

Disclaimer: Miles Vorkosigan belongs to Lois McMaster Bujold

Beta: kulfold A thousand ( Read more... )

+fanfiction, table: alphabetasoup, *english, fandom: miles vorkosigan, length: one shot

Comments 6

philomytha June 19 2008, 19:49:25 UTC

Ow. Your story is so good it hurts. Wonderful writing.

phoenixgfawkes June 20 2008, 04:19:51 UTC

Thank you very much! I shouldn't say this, but I'm glad you've really felt the story.

beatrice_otter June 20 2008, 02:29:14 UTC

Wonderful. I can picture her deciding to take David away from the Resistance, and leaving it all behind; you made her real and believable.

One problem I noticed: Ser Galen was supposedly killed in the explosion that killed his older son (David's brother). Duv believed this wholeheartedly; that's why he was shocked when Ser Galen showed up again. Yet you have him coming to David the night after his older brother died.

phoenixgfawkes June 20 2008, 04:19:08 UTC

Now I'm rather confused regarding Mrs. Galen's death, because Galeni says that she died because of his brother's death and other deaths that Ser Galen and his people had provoked in the name of the cause. Based on that I assumed that she died after her firstborn did, but then Galeni explains that once Ser died, he no longer had any family left, so his mother should've died before Ser and after her eldest son. Maybe I'm missing something here, but I always believed Ser died in a different explosion.

Well, anyway, thank you very much for commenting. In any case if I'm wrong I'll just have to warn people that it's slightly AU, thanks for pointing it out.

Oh good its up! kulfold June 26 2008, 13:38:43 UTC

As to Ser Galens death - I didn't specifically check and I will but I didn't pick that up as a problem becuase like you I always thought Ser Galen was the last to die (as far as Duv was aware) of his family

Re: Oh good its up! phoenixgfawkes June 27 2008, 15:30:30 UTC

I thought that too. If you find the answer, would you tell me, please? That way I can see whether I have to tag this as AU or not.

Bye!