Sports Night fic: Darkness Follows (Wages of Sin remix)

[phoebesmum]

It's 'reveal' day over at remix_redux; not that there was any mystery when it came to SN, and certainly not when it came to this one. No-one else would take a death!fic and make it more depressing. Still - I was reasonably pleased with the way it turned out, and the original author hasn't DFed me ... yet. *smiles winningly and promises to write a happy

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[phoebesmum]

You already knew it was me, I bet?

Thank you! I've (sekritly, 'cos it doesn't do to whine) been feeling a bit unwoved lately, so hugses are always welcome.

And I loved the original. Poor, poor Casey. That's two Remixes in a row he's ended up dead!

[inlovewithnight]

God, that's so...::shivers:: Wow. Beautifully done.

[phoebesmum]

Thank you so much for saying so - I'm so glad you liked it.

[scout_kent]

Is it evil to think that Casey might as well get hit by a cab, if he's going to leave Danny?

I think this is my favorite remix to date. I love the contrast with the original story - - hmmm, is contrast the word I want?

Casey worrying about looking ridiculous is wonderful, and so so human. And I love him trying to find the right time for the break-up. "bones melting into gold" is a fabulous phrase.

[phoebesmum]

Thank you very much - I'm so grateful to you for saying so, you would not believe. (Well, okay, you might.) I worked quite hard to get it right, and it's good to know that someone appreciates it.

And, yes, probably evil, but still ... serve him right!

[quiesce]

Well, damn. Twice.

First, because I shouldn't've read the original fic before this. Not because one story doesn't hold up in comparison to the other or anything like that, but because this is a completely different story when read on its own. This is Casey, trapped and about to do something drastic, and while his intentions are in the right place under the circumstances, I can't help but hope that something stops him because I know that if it plays out the way Casey intends, it will hurt. And so this is ouchy, but it ends just in time to hold on to the slim chance that maybe Casey doesn't break up with Dan. But knowing the original fic before reading this means that I already knew that the slim chance I was holding out on came true, but yielded even worse results for poor, poor Danny.

The second damn is because I wanted to write this, (something very similar, anyway) and you did it far better than I ever would have done. And you made it far more hurty too which, in my books, is always a good thing

[phoebesmum]

Poor Danny. I swear I did not set out to find the most depressing fic I could and then add an extra layer of depressing-ness. It's just ... I seem to have a knack, or something. But, having decided to write a thoroughly miserable fic, I'm glad it seems to have worked.

Natalie would know. For such is the power of Natalie.

You should write your version of the fic anyway. It'll be completely different, and 'better' is entirely subjective. I think pretty much everyone's better than me, apart from one or two who ... not. And who shall remain nameless, in the interests of LJ discretion. And then I could read it!

[kmousie]

God, this is so beautiful and haunting and terrible. You're drastically gifted, my dear. And a pox on anyone who says otherwise.

*big hugs*

I'm going to go count citations now. Mindless enough!

[phoebesmum]

Thank you! And thank you for all your kind comments and support - I really do appreciate all of it, more than I can say.

[kmousie]

You're welcome...likewise. ♥