Aw, this was so sweet and so beautiful and very sensual all at once. The two of them are so cute really, and I love the way you write them, it's brilliant.
Poor Ten, not wanting to even face Jack after their argument, and both of them avoiding each other until the next morning. I loved how it was Ten who approached Jack and asked him what he wanted to do, as they both ended up back inside their bedroom for the best make up sex.
Wow! That shower scene was just so hot and sexy, the way Jack took care of Ten, washing his gorgeous hair with his favorite shampoo, bringing him almost to the brink of orgasm, and Ten's reactions were so beautiful.
I giggled when Ten actually took over and initiated their sexy times in the bedroom, taking care of his Jack and making him feel so good. Both of them feeling sated and happy and agreeing not to argue again.
Thank you so much for this brilliant follow up fic to your other fantastic fics with the boys, I loved it to bits and I have saved it to my memories along with the other fics. *hugs*
I will definitely subscribe to an AU where CoE never happened and Jack is travelling with the Doctor. Very much as it should be :) Nice that he seems to realise when he's been a prat, too.
The only thing that I really found disconcerting was the tense-switch. The fic is completely in past tense until they're in the shower. Then suddenly you switch to present tense, and then at the end you switch back to past. It doesn't make grammatical sense, and it's distracting for the reader.
Thank you very much for that. :) I went through it with an extra-fine nit comb and I think the tense issues are actually fixed now. (I really need to find a couple of beta readers. Most of the ones on my beta filter haven't watched the show, or don't nitpick me enough like you just did ... would you mind helping out every once in a while if I were to email you drafts? I'd be glad to reciprocate.)
I'm so sorry - I only just saw this now. I wish I could offer to help, but I already BR for quite a lot of people and I don't have a lot of free time as it is. Maybe you could ask on some of the DW comms if anyone - especially someone with decent grammar ability - would be willing to BR?
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Poor Ten, not wanting to even face Jack after their argument, and both of them avoiding each other until the next morning. I loved how it was Ten who approached Jack and asked him what he wanted to do, as they both ended up back inside their bedroom for the best make up sex.
Wow! That shower scene was just so hot and sexy, the way Jack took care of Ten, washing his gorgeous hair with his favorite shampoo, bringing him almost to the brink of orgasm, and Ten's reactions were so beautiful.
I giggled when Ten actually took over and initiated their sexy times in the bedroom, taking care of his Jack and making him feel so good. Both of them feeling sated and happy and agreeing not to argue again.
Thank you so much for this brilliant follow up fic to your other fantastic fics with the boys, I loved it to bits and I have saved it to my memories along with the other fics. *hugs*
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The only thing that I really found disconcerting was the tense-switch. The fic is completely in past tense until they're in the shower. Then suddenly you switch to present tense, and then at the end you switch back to past. It doesn't make grammatical sense, and it's distracting for the reader.
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Going to read your sequel now.
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