This was gorgeous. I loved that Blaine's wings changed, but that they didn't just become a regular colour and I enjoyed listening to the music while I was listening. Very nice and well done :D
Rose, this fic is lovely! It was such a delight to read, I loved the universe you created, I loved how they were outcasts in such opposite ways, I loved their interactions, the idea for a musical coffee shop... And Blackbird was perfect <3 The song choices were excellent, too! And the blue wings, they were totally reflecting Kurt's eyes, they are so beautiful in my head :3
If there was one thing: the tenses were kind of all over the place. At the beginning, I was sure that this was written in present tense and sometimes past slipped in, and started to list all the slips, but they kept switching a lot! They even switched within paragraphs :) the last... fifth? I think is mostly in past tense, but when you have the time, I think you should double-check those shifty tenses ;)
This was a pretty, sweet story, thank you! And kudos to the artist, the picture looks so lovely, too! Helped me imagine the coffeeshop a lot :)
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If there was one thing: the tenses were kind of all over the place. At the beginning, I was sure that this was written in present tense and sometimes past slipped in, and started to list all the slips, but they kept switching a lot! They even switched within paragraphs :) the last... fifth? I think is mostly in past tense, but when you have the time, I think you should double-check those shifty tenses ;)
This was a pretty, sweet story, thank you! And kudos to the artist, the picture looks so lovely, too! Helped me imagine the coffeeshop a lot :)
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