Ficlet: Carpenters and Sons

[phaballa]

Carpenters and Sons

Fandom: popslash
Pairings: Genish, Nick
Comments: boomingvoice asked for a Nick something-or-other in the style of JD Salinger, and this is what came out. I am not sure it's successful, but I think we can all see the Holden Caufield in Nick Carter, so um. Yeah.

Comments

[llamabitchyo]

I don't remember enough Salinger to know whether this worked as a writing exercise, but it's a beautiful little fic. (And you could so write the angsty Joshlynn epic in a style similar to this.)

And the poor broken horn. That's a great image along with Aaron's explanation of why it's better.

[phaballa]

But I want someone to write the angst disturbing Joshlynn fic FOR me :P *whines*

Also, thank you :)

[kira_j]

MARRY ME! He's happiest when AJ is wearing sunglasses. why do you insist on breaking my heart??? and then you follow it with this: AJ says, "Nice scarf." Nick can't tell if AJ is mocking him or not. He can't tell anything when AJ wears the sunglasses, but he thinks probably AJ is mocking him because lately AJ doesn't ever have anything nice to say.

Brian was one of the nicest people Nick knew. Brian was never a phony. <3333333333333

When Nick's on stage he feels alive and real and perfect, even though he knows that performing is pretty much the opposite of all that. i like this line even better out of context. it's like the most hopeful part for me. because it shows he's a little disilusioned.

THE UNICORN!!! i was hoping you'd change the ending and not break it. but then you get aaron to say he liked it even before he realized it was broken or maybe even because it was broken. i just. UNICORNS AREN'T EVEN REAL. andrea, i insist we elope.

[phaballa]

Oh god, the part in Catcher in the Rye when the record breaks and it's just so heart-wrenching? And like, the symbol of having to grow up and take responsibility and Be A Man and all that? Ugh, oh man. I really didn't want to break the unicorn. But then I had to! Because that is how it goes.

It's funny because I heard this great story on this American Life a few weeks ago about a woman who goes through life up until she's like 30 thinking that unicorns are real. She thinks they're like, an endangered species or something. And I kept thinking about that while writing this. Like, how can anyone believe unicorns are real? Except it's not really that fantastic of a notion. It's just a horse with a horn. Lots of animals have horns! Anyway. Tangent :P

[kira_j]

ahahahahaha DUDE. when i met nopseud i confessed that i had believed in unicorns until i was like 19 i kid you not. i remember asking my dad why they died out and he was like !!??!?!! and told me the truth and i was like. oh okay. i know they don't exist NOW. i figured they'd just became extinct.. i never thought they were magical or anything! i wasn't THAT stupid :P

[phaballa]

Unicorns are so plausible! I mean... horse with a horn. Not a big deal, right? They're not like dragons or something. Although I am sure there are people who think dragons were real. They were just like dinosaurs, but with fire!

[boomingvoice]

This is really beautiful. I mean, I don't know. I think it's perfect. What about it makes you think it's not successful?

I always really enjoy the nick/aj dynamics you write. They're uncomfortably real and sibling-y, and I am not really into the nick/aj (nick & aj, whatever)? But I like yours.

The Brian paragraph was lovely too. I know you have trouble with him? And I guess you can sort of tell, since maybe he comes across as generic good guy, but it doesn't hurt this fic at all. I loved the "It really did taste like wedding cake." (why? I don't know!)

and all of the Aaron stuff was breathtaking. And heartbreaking. I think you did good.

[phaballa]

Thank you! Well, I don't know that it's terribly Salinger-like in style is why I'm not sure it's successful, but I really like it, so :) I'm glad you like it too!