Water under the bridge - chapter four

[pforte]

Apologies for the delay. I hope it's worth the wait. :)

Title: Water Under The Bridge (chapter four)
Fandom: Twilight
Pairing: Bella/Edward
Rating: PG-13
Summary: AU. Bella wasn't so uncharacteristically lucky when she jumped off the cliff.
Spoilers: Spoilers for Twilight and New Moon. Up until Bella's dive in New Moon everything is canon.

Comments

[mexicantt]

I can never really say it the way it should be, but I loved it! My favorite was how you ended it - once I hit that last third or so, it just got so much better, like you were getting back into the swing of writing them. And it was good.

How I wish Bella had this much sense in the books.

[eumelkeks]

Yes, the philosophical aspects are very unlike Twilight, so this may disturb the flow, but I wanted to make Bella's decision more of a struggle. I never had the feeling that she fully understood what she was getting into in the series.

[mexicantt]

Me, too - but she could have. And I think the time you chose to put this story in is perfect for us to see that bit of her coming out - she's already gone through her loss of Edward and she has come back from it, sort of, and needs to be able to understand she can stand on her own two feet.
Metaphorically speaking, obviously.

[pforte]

Metaphorically speaking, obviously.

Bwahahahaha, mean.

[eclipsed_sky]

Moar now please....

[pforte]

I haven't even started on the next chapter. *hides*

Thanks for reading. :)

[eclipsed_sky]

*cries in the corner* I know what you mean about real life being busy and all, but your story is so awesome. I can't wait till you have the time to write another really awesome chapter.

[lillbet]

This was good- I really enjoyed reading it. As opposed to, say, reading an actual Twilight book. Which still makes me hurt inside.

Looking forward to the next installment. :)

[pforte]

I edited a few things you suggested just now, so your work hasn't been in vain. ;)

[lillbet]

Dude, I am really sorry. I like beta-ing for you- it's a nice break from the stuff I do every day and it's also a good read. :)

[pforte]

Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm trying to be quicker with the next chapter but real life is busy busy.

[pforte]

That's only because there is close to zero logic in BD. *is mean*

Thanks for reading and commenting.