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There's a First Time For Everything

Jul 11, 2010 20:20

Title: There's a First Time for Everything
Pairing: Pinto
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Zach always tops. Well, maybe not today.
Disclaimer: We do not own the actors, unfortunately. Not even as pets.
Word Count: 4712
Authors: petbubble and leandralocke
Authors' notes: I think there's a majority opinion in the fandom that Zach always (or mostly) tops when Pinto get down to ( Read more... )

rps, zachary quinto, chris pine, genre: romance, rpf, pinto, nc-17, length: one-shot, genre: fluff

Comments 22

_faeriequeen July 13 2010, 00:47:47 UTC

Mmm, that was adorable and hot - good job!

Hope you don't mind, but I was wondering if one of you has English as a second language as there's a few third person singular neuter 'ones' in there that we don't tend use in English.
/languages nerd

leandralocke July 13 2010, 10:47:51 UTC

Oh, yes... I'm German, but petbubble is English. Which parts did you mean? And it's good you're being nerdy *g* I always need to learn more, and it's always good to have a third person take a look because even if you write stuff together you sometimes tend to overlook details. So do feel free to correct us ;-)

And yes, my goodness, the Captain does look fine in plaid :D

_faeriequeen July 13 2010, 11:31:53 UTC

just that odd but extremely sexy look on his face as he stood there for a second, looking at the older one.

You'd only really use the phrase 'the older one' when you've already talked about two people, e.g 'There were two men at the door. The older one had bigger eyebrows.' (Lol.) The way you've used it just flagged up something in my head that made me think it was a direct translation from another language. You'd have to use 'older man' instead for it to make sense, as at the moment that sentence makes me think that Chris has seen two Zachs and that there's an older one and a younger one. Lol.

IDK if I've explained myself very well - I've only just got up so that paragraph probably doesn't make much sense!

CFine + plaid = OTP! ;)

amerasu1013 September 23 2010, 02:11:38 UTC

*moves hand slowly towards mouse to bookmark this in the "save and re-read this sh*it" folder*

... GUH. This was HOT. Am incohe-thingy, cause... thing, uh, think-thingy melted. Yes. Wow UNF indeed...

darkestnight01 October 13 2010, 19:51:32 UTC

yeah... holy shit YEAH! that was definitely some hot stuff here *fans self*

and now I'm supposed to write a report for uni? I hope it doesn't end with porn - might kill my tutor XD