How Quickly Comes the Breaking Dawn

[peskywhistpaw]

Title: How Quickly Comes the Breaking Dawn
Fandom: Twilight
Pairing: ultimately Jacob/Bella
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 5,451
Summary: The flight from Seattle, Washington, to Fairbanks, Alaska, is three hours and forty-two minutes long. And for all three hours and forty-two minutes, Bella Cullen feels as though she cannot breathe. It is time at last

Comments

[unwing]

Wow.
Like that's all I can say right now. hah. This is brilliant C:

[peskywhistpaw]

Awww, thank you so much, Fiki! ♥

[yourgravity]

This was simply spectacular. Your characterizations were spot-on, and of course, the Bella/Jacob angle drew me in. I even liked your Bella. The story was haunting and beautiful, and I'm very envious of how well you pulled this off. Bravo, and I look forward to reading more from you!

[peskywhistpaw]

THANK YOU! I'm so relieved to hear that I didn't get everyone OOC - the only Twilight things I've written before this have been about 500 words each, and haven't had any dialogue, because I was always afraid to bugger up the characterizations! XD And I'm so glad you liked Bella!

[yourgravity]

That's my worry, as well, when I write TW fic, is totally botching the characterizations, not to mention the dialogue. So yeah, I feel you on that! But not to worry, you did an excellent job. Inspires me to write more, in fact!

And yes, I did like your Bella, which is something, considering I've got a bit of a love-hate relationship going on with Bella of the books. hee.

[marycontraire]

This was moody and lovely, and of course I'm all for any fic where Bella ends up human, and with Jacob.

But what I really love is Rosalie's role in this story. Very in character and very interesting. Excellent fic.

[peskywhistpaw]

Thanks so much! I love fics where Bella ends up human, too - and it's sad, because I haven't seen a lot lately. :(

And I'm glad you liked Rosalie's role! I hadn't even thought of putting her in at first and then I was like, oh... but that would make so much sense!

♥

[__dittany]

I BEGAN TO HYPERVENTILATE when Edward bit her. LITERALLY.
God, if this is how I'm going to react to BD... except for BD is going to be worse than this because this was AMAZING.
AMAZING.
I love Rosalie's role.
*ded*
Amazing.

[peskywhistpaw]

*squee* Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it! (And I am secretly glad that you hyperventilated. My work here is done! XD)

[peskywhistpaw]

FLUFF! *drools*

If this happened in canon, I would die right on the spot and go to heaven. Doomed!shipper heaven.

[peskywhistpaw]

I haven't the faintest idea. I guess the majority of the world isn't awesome enough to join the Doomed Ship Club, therefore making it the Non-doomed Ship Club. Boo.

Also, icon love. ♥