Masquerade Draft 6

May 09, 2009 01:53

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blue_infernian May 12 2009, 18:40:10 UTC
That puts the childhood obsession with Neopets and Nano babies in a whole new light. Freaky. The Elsie and "Moo-Cow" bit also reminded me of 'RENT'. But that's just because I'm a sick person in need of professional help. I really liked it. It made me rethink all of those fads that we were into when we were younger.

If you were to re-write it, how would it be different? I'm just asking, because you mentioned that you would use the same premise.

I couldn't help but think when Rob was saying that he would be psychologically damaged, "You are already damaged". ; )

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persephone_blue May 14 2009, 02:32:45 UTC
Yay! Awesome reaction! :D

If I were to re-write it, I almost want to concentrate on just one relationship. It would probably be the "frienemy" dynamic between Elsie and Anna. Rob, Sherry, and Jason add something to the story, but I feel like I'm stretching it a bit too thin.

"You are already damaged"

Oh, yeeaah. Rob could have his own story, honestly. Hmmm.

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