Bleach- "One Step Behind"

[peroxide_fic]

Title: One Step Behind
Universe: Bleach
Theme/Topic: N/A
Rating: PG
Character/Pairing/s: lightly, vaguely, Chad+Ichigo
Warnings/Spoilers: Through the very beginning of the Arrankar arc.
Word Count: 1,541
Summary: Chad feels distance.
Dedication: hanachan01’s request for the March round of bleach_flashfic! Sorry if it is a bit boring! It’s been so long since I’ve

Comments

[ashpik1]

Very touching and sweet. I think Chad is an underrated character in the series and this was just great.

[peroxidepest17]

Happy you enjoyed! ^_^

[cheloya]

Very true. It's something a lot of the characters in the series can relate to, but it's especially true for Chad because of that promise, and because of how close he and Ichigo were. Are. Very good, Pero.

[peroxidepest17]

Chad is HARD TO WRITE. *sigh* But it was a good challenge, I guess. XD

[eternalsayonara]

How can you write something so awesome? HOW? :O

I like the second person POV and I think you've captured Chad perfectly. Stoic but powerful. I like how he's a few steps behind Ichigo, but he doesn't mind since he can still watch his back. And the whole shadow metaphor of how it can lengthen and shorten throughout the day, but Chad will still be a part of Ichigo. I also like how Chad has to keep his promise even when he's dying, dead, whatever, because it's a part of him as much as being big and strong is. And how Chad's oddities don't matter to him because they help Ichigo. (I think I'm going backwards).

Wow. <3

[peroxidepest17]

Glad you liked! ^_^

[sophiap]

Oh, this is brilliant. I think you've managed to distill who Chad is perfectly here. The very first line gets right to the heart of it. I Iike your use of second person here; it lends to the contemplative feel of the piece. If I had to offer any criticism, it would be that this might need little tightening up--while the use of repetition is effective in places, it was getting to the point where I was really noticing it. But still, this is very, very well done. The realization that Ichigo is the one who is truly different is a poignant one, and I love how you present the idea of Chad feeling hate (shocking!) and then qualifying what that hate is for.

[peroxidepest17]

Yeah, I will need to cut when I get back. LOL this is sort of...the raw word vomit I guess? Anyway! I will see you when I get back. *goes to do last minute equip checks* >>