Comments | periantari: Breaking of the Fellowship (BotF) Movie-verse ficlet...

periantari

Breaking of the Fellowship (BotF) Movie-verse ficlet...

Nov 05, 2007 01:09

Stored in the fanfic folder for last ten years... (well as long as i've written it..ok..maybe one year... :P) I finally have guts to post.
Comments/critique welcome since it's not beta-ed and i don't like it a whole lot. :P

BotF ficlet
700+ words
WIP/desperately needing advice/Constructive criticism welcome

( Where had he gone? Why was it taking such a long time for him to reach a decision? Did something happen to Frodo? )

pippin, fanfic, breaking of the fellowship, merry, boromir

Comments 19

grey_wonderer November 5 2007, 08:30:06 UTC

Another brilliant one! I always like Merry's voice as narrator. I don't know exactly why but I do see him as one who would have watched it all very closely and been able to tell it exactly as it happened no matter how dark. This was very well done and I like the way it ends with Merry passing out.

periantari November 7 2007, 03:08:19 UTC

I can relate to Merry somehow and find him fun to write... i think i have a lot of Merry fanfic..more than others..(well maybe ties with Frodo. ;) Merry seems to be the choice here because we can see so much emotion from him starting from the point indicated by my present icon for this entry~
Thanks for liking this! and i was really nervous at first about it! =) :hugsyoumore:

grey_wonderer November 7 2007, 03:11:46 UTC

Don't be nervous! It is very good and you write Merry very well.

periantari November 7 2007, 03:19:27 UTC

aww thanks, GW! =)

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dreamflower02 November 5 2007, 10:44:46 UTC

I also love the scene with Boromir's fighting for the hobbits--it brings tears every time!

Merry's POV here is a very good choice!

periantari November 7 2007, 03:09:41 UTC

That scene is done so very well by PJ and crew~
Thanks for liking this and thinking Merry was a good choice! :blush: (3rd person just wasn't working before... :p)

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periantari November 7 2007, 03:11:25 UTC

I remember talking to you about this! So this fic should be fro you, dear Took!
Remember my Merry phase last year? I think this was written during that time... i still owe you something about him waking up...seeing that he's trapped by the Uruk-hai-- or maybe it was me who was always thinking about that even in sleep. ;)

This scene is love to the millionth gazillionth power! :D

shirebound November 5 2007, 12:33:02 UTC

Ohhh, Merry's POV is just perfect.

periantari November 7 2007, 03:11:58 UTC

Thanks so much, Janet! ♥ =)

holbytla November 5 2007, 13:54:21 UTC

Boromir shepherded the hobbits in front of him
I love your use of shepherded here!
Loved reading this, dearie =D

periantari November 7 2007, 03:13:47 UTC

(((((holbytla!)))))
thanks for commenting, dear~ and thanks for liking this! =) hope you're doing well~