Don't Touch Me

[perfectillusi0n]

Title: Don't Touch Me
Pairing: Harry/Draco
Rating: Mild NC-17 for some language
Wordcount: 1,362
Disclaimer: Characters and HP universe belong to J.K. Rowling and associated publishers. I own nothing. B
Summary: ”Don’t touch me Malfoy”You keep saying that, over and over again - It causes my ears to bleed and my heart to crumble but I pretend I don’

Comments

[materia_indigo]

Could you perhaps adjust your text formatting? You're using a light color for the text over a light background, and it's pretty well impossible to read.

sorry

[perfectillusi0n]

I most certainly can.
I hope it'll be easier to read now.

[bryoneybrynn]

Mmm. There's something about this fic I really like. I love the image of Harry saying "Don't touch me" sometimes with violence, sometimes with acceptance, but always fighting, even after so long. I love the destructiveness of he and Draco being together.

I will say, this piece would really benefit from a good beta. It would tighten it up and make it a much stronger story. You should think about - it's a nice piece of writing and you should show it off to its best advantage.

(also, yes, the font is kind of hard to read - needs a darker setting)

Thanks for sharing this lovely story.

<3

[perfectillusi0n]

Thank you so much. It means a lot to me that people not only take the time to read my fic but also to give me critique how to make it better.
I think I'll be looking for a beta.

Re: <3

[bryoneybrynn]

I don't have time to be an ongoing beta but I'd be happy to give this one fic a go-over if you like. Just let me know. :)

Re: <3

[perfectillusi0n]

That would be really cool if you wouldn't mind!

[aldehyde]

i like this story - i have a thing for super angsty pieces where the boys keep hurting and comforting each other b/c they're so lost, and there's nothing else that can be done.

there are a few grammatical errors and odd sentence structures, but i see that bryoneybrynn has already offered to look over this piece for you. a beta will definitely help b/c it's a strong story and fixing the language will make it even better. good job! :)

[perfectillusi0n]

Exactly why I love this parring.
There's just so much to work with and so many difficult emotions.

Yeah I know. I wrote it a long time ago and now reading it through I realize it needs some touching up.

Thanks for reading btw.
Reading is love :D

[thrnbrooke]

Holy moly! That was heartbreaking!

[perfectillusi0n]

I know :(
but with these two, it can't be all
walking on sunshine.
thanks for reading!

[dove1211]

God that was intense and beautiful! I love the love/hate thing going on. It's just my type of story. How they deny each other but go on still because they just can't be without each other. *goes on to sequel* I love your Queer As Folk icon by the way ^_^
Later,
France

[perfectillusi0n]

Thank you!
I love those kind of stories too.
It just seems more realistic with a lot of angst between these two!
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
<3