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Fic: Cereus

Apr 12, 2011 06:42

Title: Cereus
Category: Smallville
Word Count: 1408
Date of Completion: 11 April 2011
Primary Characters: Clark Kent, Lois Lane
Rating: PG-13
Setting: Post-S10.
Summary: Reflections on Clark and Lois.
Notes: Written for jlvsclrk for help_japan, and beta'd by captaindove.

( Lois is never cold when Clark takes her up into the air, even in the night; he holds her so close that she can hear his heart beating. Sometimes he takes her up so high and then holds her so still that she thinks they have been suspended in amber without their realising: beneath them Metropolis looks like a constellation of glimmering golden stars neatly placed onto a grid as if by the hand of an obsessive-compulsive god. )

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Comments 10

serenography April 14 2011, 04:28:00 UTC

lifesend April 15 2011, 02:43:59 UTC

This is beautiful. I love the different analogies, how you compare their feeling and relationship to different things. It's unique and refreshing and simply beautiful.

svgurl May 3 2011, 02:24:55 UTC

Wow ... I wish I had enough words to describe how absolutely amazing this is. I absolutely love your Clark voice- it's really spot on. The description of him listening to Lois and how the piano player sounds different was really interesting and creative yet totally realistic.

All the details in the story just blow me away. I really love your Lois too ... the way she sneaks up on him is adorable. Them going flying together is lovely.

Then she kisses his neck, his clavicle, his hands, and he only looks at her with those big, star-spangled eyes as if to say: why me?
Beautiful. I can imagine it all too easily.

And I love how you talked about Clark realizing his love for her. I agree that he didn't realize how much he needed or wanted her until she was gone.

there was nothing he had wanted less than to stop loving Lois, though it hurt him.
Love that line.

The ending was just perfect too.

Wonderful job!

athena606 September 9 2011, 17:20:46 UTC

awww that was lovely...

snackbreak November 14 2012, 22:01:09 UTC

Wow, I am horrified at myself for somehow missing this piece until now. Your stories always reach down and squeeze my heart something fierce. Love this!!