Comments | percylicious: Bittersweet

haubing in percylicious

Bittersweet

Mar 16, 2009 20:24

Title: Bittersweet
Author: haubing
Pairing: none
Rating: G
Summary: Nico is sitting on a hillside thinking about his life.
Notes: Set after BotL.

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x: angst, #oneshot, a: haubing, p: none

Comments 3

jasonstrong March 17 2009, 01:40:35 UTC

It was good, but if you're going to not double space like the people at FanFiction make you, could you indent? Other than that, really good.

I understand, though. I always submit my chapters in single space, and FF.net changes it by double spacing it.

haubing March 17 2009, 12:00:45 UTC

Thanks!
Done. FF.net has spoiled me....

peridottears June 9 2009, 01:30:25 UTC

Good way of describing how Nico feels, and its own irony with the title. I would give grammar an A -- maybe you could use, like, semicolons a bit more to replace some commas. Yet, overall, it's good.