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Fic - An Excerpt from 'Road to Revolution: the Life and Times of Roy Mustang'

Jan 19, 2010 16:48

This pretty aptly demonstrates why I am not an historian...

Fandom: Fullmetal Alchemist
Pairing/Characters: Ensemble
Content Advisory: General audiences
Words: 1,224
Summary: A fictional historian on a certain former Colonel and his associates.

( A point on which all sources agree is the somewhat volatile nature of Mustang's relationship with Edward Elric during this period... )

character: edward elric, relationship: roy/riza, fandom: fullmetal alchemist, type: fic, character: vato falman, character: winry rockbell, character: alphonse elric, character: riza hawkeye, character: roy mustang, relationship: ed/winry

Comments 40

corposant January 19 2010, 21:50:19 UTC

This is really very brilliant. I love how you were able to convey this whole other future whole in such few paragraphs.

Armstrong as a romantic novelist was a stroke of genius.

sixpences January 20 2010, 18:45:44 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad the sense of the whole future came across- there's much more of it in my head than I could even hint at.

Somehow I could see Armstrong doing very well with something as overblown and silly as a romance novel!

kashicat January 20 2010, 00:27:28 UTC

This is truly brilliant! I'm with the others, who want to know if there are previous chapters of this. Either way, it's wonderful!

Do you mind an editing note? In these two lines, "...which lead Mustang into his earliest confrontation..." and "The exact events that lead up to Hughes's tragic murder...," the correct word is "led."

The present tense verb is "lead" (pronounced "leed") and the past tense is "led." When it's spelled "lead" and pronounced "led," you're talking about the metal.

I hope you don't mind that I mentioned this. I thought if you wanted your chapter to look as professional as possible, you might want to change those.

Absolutely awesome piece!

sixpences January 20 2010, 18:48:58 UTC

Thank you! Alas previous chapters are only hypothetical, but I am very tempted to revisit this concept, it was too fun.

Cheers for catching that bit of grammar- that particular mixup is an old bad habit of mine. It always takes me a couple of goes to spell 'receive' as well.

kashicat January 21 2010, 02:29:22 UTC

Oh my yes. I always have to recite that little saying I learned in school, "I before E except after C."

And I get things like lay, laid, and lie right, but I always have to think them through first.

jamminbison January 20 2010, 01:11:44 UTC

So well done! Funny and smart, man, what a combo! And I wanna read Gears right. now. Haha!

This:
While some, eg. Lucy Brosh...have argued that in fact the armour functioned as Alphonse's body during this time, due to some alchemical accident, this view is now largely discredited.

Made me giggle and as always ya gotta wonder if all those discredited events in real history have some credit after all. ;D

sixpences January 20 2010, 18:53:48 UTC

Thank you! I imagine Winry's autobiography would be a pretty great read (though I bet Ed and Al had to convince her to edit out a lot of overly-technical gushing).

ya gotta wonder if all those discredited events in real history have some credit after all

Historians can be a pretty funny bunch sometimes!

shadowsinfire January 20 2010, 02:34:00 UTC

much love for this indeed! I had a smile on my face all the way through.

sixpences January 20 2010, 18:54:10 UTC

Thank you! Always glad to make somebody smile!

starlady38 January 20 2010, 02:47:30 UTC

OMG this is brilliant. Written by the victorshistorians, indeed.

sixpences January 20 2010, 18:54:35 UTC

Thank you! Historians can be a weird bunch...